Gift Post #6

[gemkazoni]

Title: The Queen
Recipient: pikabot
Rating: M (underage girls and alcohol, mentions of sex, foul language)
Characters/Pairings: Liz, Patti
Summary: Life on the streets.
Notes: Liz’s life on the streets.

Comments

[suspicious]

Oh wow, I really liked this. Very intense yet still in character, despite how different of a story it is for the whole crew. You handled the OC's well, too.

[shinebunny]

Thanks! Yeah, this was definitely a stretch, so I was worried about how it was going to turn out.

[une_pomme_folle]

That was so good! The OCs were written beautifully, not dominating the story but still having distinct, believable personalities at the same time. Liz and Patti were just ;_; so fantastic.

Things continued for about five minutes, until she saw him putting his hand on Patti’s tiny arm.

Liz strode up to him and punched him in the face.

I may have yelled out 'Fuck yeah!'.

[shinebunny]

LOL, yes! That was what I was going for! I definitely had a 'fuck yeah!' moment writing it.

And thank you for the compliment on the OCs. :) I was really worried about how they were going to mesh, but it seems like it worked out well.

[tifa767]

I think you did a great job with this

[pheonee]

Ahhhhh so amazing! I love the details, the rich backstory you build. The way this flows--blotty, uneven, but with its own steady rhythm--it's perfect for the scenario. This seems practically tailored to one of my requests--so, unintentional as it may be, thank you for writing it!

[shinebunny]

Haha, you're welcome! I'm glad you enjoyed it as much as if it were your own, and that the funny pacing worked for you (phew!).

[cornerofmadness]

i really thought this was great. You did a convincing job of depicted the harsh life on the street and gave Liz especially a lot of depth