My sunstroked memory

[scun]

When I left her

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[sweetbutsour]

love it.

[scun]

Thank you! any idea for a title? I'm stuck.

[writinggreen]

beautiful. Augh, the last verse is so beautiful.

[famebound]

If it were me I'd probably just call it "When I left her," although I don't think that's a very accurate teaser for the rest of the poem. Maybe "My mother is Washington state?" That's always how I title my journal entries, pick out the best phrase in quotation marks :P

Also, I can't believe your mom is that old. Well, I can, now that I think about how old your siblings are, but she definitely doesn't look that old.

And on a semi-related note, I said something about Tukwila the other day and everyone I was with thought I was mispronouncing tequila.

[famebound]

Oh, and I think it's absolutely beautiful. I just got so distracted with trying to be helpful. :)

[scun]

ha ha tukwila=tequila. That actually is making me lol in my office here at school. Thanks for the help, I've settled on "my sunstroked memory" for now but since it's more about her I might do "my mother is washington state" I was hesitant to do it that way cause I thought it might be too obvious, but it's the first line I thought of in the whole poem so it probably only feels like that to me. Also, Northwestern poetry contests eat that stuff up lol.

[chainshot]

This makes me miss home so much. I also feel like I am the offspring of the Pacific Northwest. No matter where I am, it will always be such a strong part of who I am. It is my identity.

I would be more likely to pick something clever that subtly hints at the context but not directly. If I wrote this poem I would probably call it something like "Northwest's Progeny" or some sort of synonymous phrase.

[sweetbutsour]

I totally relate... The longer I'm away from the Northwest... The more I realize how much a part of me it is... and how much it is home. Like, the region is home- not so much my house there, but the region.