LJ Idol Week 8: First World Problem

[scriblesnbraile]

The light from the setting sun dances on the water. The younger children run screaming and laughing in and out of the waves. I sit on the sand, idly tracing patterns in it with the tips of my fingers and watching my younger sister out in the water with the other children. We’ve been here for five days, but I haven’t gone into the water yet. It’s

Comments

[basric]

A touching loving entry. Well written. I teared up so it affected me. So it was powerful too to wring out emotions,

[scriblesnbraile]

Thank you.

[soprano1790]

Ok. I think I get it. It was very subtle. I didn't think I would, but i think I understand. I love the beginning. It's so happy and magical, and then... everything changes, and all the happy imagery is gone, and everyone is sad. Sadsauce! Although not as sad as I thought it was going to be. This is one of my favorites!

[scriblesnbraile]

Awww, thanks. Yeah, I was hoping it would be subtle but not too subtle. Glad you liked it.

[2bbilingual]

Wow. I love this. I could totally picture the gorgeous beach you described. Beautiful.

[scriblesnbraile]

Awwww, thanks.

[imafarmgirl]

Nice fiction. Very believable.

[scriblesnbraile]

Thank you.

[wyliekat]

What a beautiful vignette.

[scriblesnbraile]

Thank you.