FIC: Not Even a Hint Left Behind

[scribblinlenore]

First, I want to say to all those in the path of Hurricane Katrina that my thoughts are with you. I hope everyone stays safe and well.

Here's my story for the Writers' Workout Challenge, using the first person subjective, a completely new fan fiction writing experience for me. I loved this challenge. It really did push me to consider new things.

Comments

[digitalwave]

This is truly beautiful, sweetie. There is such a sense of peace and love and acceptance laced throughout the story.

I love all of the detail and even love all the questions we're left with; Where did the boys go, are they still alive? What happened to Chloe? Did she die on assignment? It's the sign of a good story that we want to know all of these things.

Thank you so much as always for sharing it with us.

*hugs*

[scribblinlenore]

Thanks, doll! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. And didn't mind being left with some questions. I usually try to tie up all the loose ends in my stories, but since I was trying something new anyway, I decided to experiment in other ways, as well.

I really appreciate your lovely comments! *hugs*

[luvmax1]

That was just amazing, Lenore. So haunting, and beautiful. And you made me like Lana- I didn't know that was possible.

[scribblinlenore]

Oh, thank you! This is so nice to hear. I was afraid that no one would read this since it was from Lana's POV. But this is how I imagine Lana could be...or maybe should be...if AlMiles didn't put all their issues on her. So glad you enjoyed it!

[galerian_ash]

Oh, wow. That really was beautiful, especially considering it's your first foray into this POV. I might not be a fan of Lana, but your version of her is achingly breathtaking. Even made a bit sniffly at the end, I have to admit.

[scribblinlenore]

I'm so glad you enjoyed it! This was a great challenge. I really learned a lot, most notably that writing a first person POV is damned difficult. *g*

I know Lana is not most people's favorite character. *understates* So thank you for taking a chance on this. I really appreciate the lovely feedback.

[mahaliem]

I love how you laid it all out - Lana telling the reporter part of the story while allowing the readers to learn the rest.

Great job!

[scribblinlenore]

Thanks so much! I'm so glad you enjoyed this. I was really flailing, not sure how to approach the first person, and then I followed some of the links to resources Signe had in her post. Read something that talked about how the first person can be all the more powerful when the narrator is telling someone else's story, and this idea came right to mind.

[beeej]

Wow. How beautifully sad. And it raises almost as many questions as it answers. I felt bad for everyone in this story, and still I liked it. That's extraordinary. :)

[scribblinlenore]

Oh, thank you. That's wonderful feedback to get. I'm so glad you enjoyed this story. It was really interesting writing in the first person and from Lana's POV. Undiscovered country for me.