I really liked this, I like that they had actual discussions about their fantasies and things weren't perfect, but they found out more about each other and it made them closer, and yeah, you did an amazing job.
Oh, hey, I really like what you guys did with this. It was really clear that it was something that Ryan was into (and characters being into something is always hot). And then, I really think you captured that moment of frustration and awkwardness and embarrassment when it didn't actually work. Ryan hiding in the bathroom was almost painful to read, just because it felt so realistic. I love that this totally wasn't a PWP at all, even though it was all about sex.
It was really interesting to think about the differences between the two scenes, and Jon saying that he didn't like it when they weren't being them really tied everything together. That whole, 'you're a needy slut' thing usually really squicks me in stories, but I think you guys pulled it off pretty well. It was clear how into each other they were, ♥.
(Plus, I loved this: He has never come without a hand on him, wouldn't even think it was possible if he hadn't seen Jon do it, seen him get off just being fucked; characters switching is my most randomly favorite thing in
I started to read this last night but stopped because it was just far enough over the line that I was uncomfortable. But then I read the context notes and came back today. This is really beautiful. I love stories about couples finding ways to meet each others needs and that's really the heart of this story. So glad I didn't accidentally miss it.
BTW, the fact that I had trouble with the faux dubcon? Because it was so well written. Left a flutter of panic in my head when I realized they hadn't given Ryan a safe word. Thank you for sharing.
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I'm totally reading this again tonight.
JOOOOOOOOOON ♥
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It was really interesting to think about the differences between the two scenes, and Jon saying that he didn't like it when they weren't being them really tied everything together. That whole, 'you're a needy slut' thing usually really squicks me in stories, but I think you guys pulled it off pretty well. It was clear how into each other they were, ♥.
(Plus, I loved this: He has never come without a hand on him, wouldn't even think it was possible if he hadn't seen Jon do it, seen him get off just being fucked; characters switching is my most randomly favorite thing in
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BTW, the fact that I had trouble with the faux dubcon? Because it was so well written. Left a flutter of panic in my head when I realized they hadn't given Ryan a safe word. Thank you for sharing.
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