Seconding sandy's comment - you have a way of saying a LOT with so few words:
Buffy shows up within 48 hours, fists clenched (how dare nobody call her right away) and eyes bright and soft and shining.
There is a world of complicated feelings in that tiny sentences - how very right that you mention her hands and her eyes, two of the most important parts of Buffy, the conduits for her emotions when words fail her.
“Spike,” she says when she sees him in the hallway, her voice all breathy and trembly. She moves in for a hug, awkward and unsure, only to realize his plight as she stumbles through him and into the wall. “Spike?”
“Yeah, about that...”
I can see it going exactly this way, down to the little pauses and incomplete sentences. I've read lots of stories with this scenario and yet this is amazingly fresh.
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Buffy shows up within 48 hours, fists clenched (how dare nobody call her right away) and eyes bright and soft and shining.
There is a world of complicated feelings in that tiny sentences - how very right that you mention her hands and her eyes, two of the most important parts of Buffy, the conduits for her emotions when words fail her.
“Spike,” she says when she sees him in the hallway, her voice all breathy and trembly. She moves in for a hug, awkward and unsure, only to realize his plight as she stumbles through him and into the wall. “Spike?”
“Yeah, about that...”
I can see it going exactly this way, down to the little pauses and incomplete sentences. I've read lots of stories with this scenario and yet this is amazingly fresh.
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