Oh, wow. This was really, really well-written. In character, some beautiful imagery, and very hot to boot. I love your Alex voice, it was dead-on!
And just like that, the invisible dam between them-the one they’ve never talked about, never even acknowledged, but been acutely aware of since they were old enough to stop taking baths together-quietly and irrevocably bursts.
Woo, thank you! A big part of the reason this ran as crazy long as it did is because I find Alex so ridiculously fun to write for, I think because I'm such a Justin at heart. It's fun getting inside her head and seeing how the other half lives. XD
The funny thing? That line was only added once I realized I was going to have to break up the lair scene into two parts, because it was too big to fit into one post. It was a total, spur-of-the-moment addition to tie off part iii, and I wasn't entirely sure it worked. So thanks for the reassurance! :)
Thank you, thank you, thank you! Whew that was hot.
Heh, I was going to say 'Can I have your internet babies?' but, when I thought about it, I think this story counts as one? (Me, humble seed/idea. You, creating and birthing this.) So I'm just going to beam and say that we make awesome internet babies.
D'awwww, look what you did. Now I'm all blushing and stuff...
Seriously, thank YOU for the awesome plot bunny! It never would have occurred to me to write this otherwise, but I'm really happy with how it turned out and I'm so thrilled that you enjoyed it!
I'm working on something else right now, but I fully intend to circle back and fill out some of your other prompts. (Alex spying on Justin working out? Um, HOT!) So, more internet babies, YAY! ;)
There are no words...Ok, maybe: Smart, Sensual, Witty, and RAWR!!
This was so amazingly well written, not just the smut itself, but the character exchanges, nods to other Jalex moments, and Alex's internal monologue! Wow, it's like you live in her head, seriously. It went beyond a lemony fic into one of those reads straight out of the romance novels Alex kept mentioning (but like 1 kabillion times better).
On another note, and only because I believe in constructive criticism (so please don't take it the wrong way), I could've lived without Dean and (especially) Mason being mentioned while they were doing the deed itself. It just kinda kills the imagery. But I do love how Justin is a stallion compared to those two! ;)
Oh, and my compliments on how you wrote the physical examination portion of the story. Accurate, simplified, and sexy as all hell! Soooo looking forward to future stories, rock on!
I'm going to disagree on the whole Dean and Mason thing. I kinda liked it in that it highlighted how different Justin is from them. Your mileage obviously varies.
However, to add to the constructive crit a bit, when reading through the second time, I noticed that there are one or two spelling errors, and several missing words that my brain automatically filled in last time. If you have the chance, SvsM, could you possibly go back and edit? Or, I could proof for you, if you sent me a hard copy @ wildoneizzy @ yahoo . com
Hot fic there. But something really bugging me, there's no way Mason has bigger dick than Justin, lol, Justin is Italian, you know what they say about that.
OK, I'll grant you that Human!Mason probably isn't packing more than Justin. Wolf!Mason, though? Hung like a Great Dane.
(And this is way, way more thought than I ever imagined I'd devote to what Disney Channel stars are working with downstairs, so I think I'mma stop now. XD)
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And just like that, the invisible dam between them-the one they’ve never talked about, never even acknowledged, but been acutely aware of since they were old enough to stop taking baths together-quietly and irrevocably bursts.
This was my favorite sentence. Gave me chills. :)
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The funny thing? That line was only added once I realized I was going to have to break up the lair scene into two parts, because it was too big to fit into one post. It was a total, spur-of-the-moment addition to tie off part iii, and I wasn't entirely sure it worked. So thanks for the reassurance! :)
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Heh, I was going to say 'Can I have your internet babies?' but, when I thought about it, I think this story counts as one? (Me, humble seed/idea. You, creating and birthing this.) So I'm just going to beam and say that we make awesome internet babies.
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Seriously, thank YOU for the awesome plot bunny! It never would have occurred to me to write this otherwise, but I'm really happy with how it turned out and I'm so thrilled that you enjoyed it!
I'm working on something else right now, but I fully intend to circle back and fill out some of your other prompts. (Alex spying on Justin working out? Um, HOT!) So, more internet babies, YAY! ;)
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amazing.
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This was so amazingly well written, not just the smut itself, but the character exchanges, nods to other Jalex moments, and Alex's internal monologue! Wow, it's like you live in her head, seriously. It went beyond a lemony fic into one of those reads straight out of the romance novels Alex kept mentioning (but like 1 kabillion times better).
On another note, and only because I believe in constructive criticism (so please don't take it the wrong way), I could've lived without Dean and (especially) Mason being mentioned while they were doing the deed itself. It just kinda kills the imagery. But I do love how Justin is a stallion compared to those two! ;)
Oh, and my compliments on how you wrote the physical examination portion of the story. Accurate, simplified, and sexy as all hell! Soooo looking forward to future stories, rock on!
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However, to add to the constructive crit a bit, when reading through the second time, I noticed that there are one or two spelling errors, and several missing words that my brain automatically filled in last time. If you have the chance, SvsM, could you possibly go back and edit? Or, I could proof for you, if you sent me a hard copy @ wildoneizzy @ yahoo . com
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But something really bugging me, there's no way Mason has bigger dick than Justin, lol, Justin is Italian, you know what they say about that.
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OK, I'll grant you that Human!Mason probably isn't packing more than Justin. Wolf!Mason, though? Hung like a Great Dane.
(And this is way, way more thought than I ever imagined I'd devote to what Disney Channel stars are working with downstairs, so I think I'mma stop now. XD)
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