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[sashayed]

Title: Recompense
Fandom: Brokeback Mountain
Pairing: Jack/Ennis
Rating: R
Summary: Which made a better punishment, the punch or the kiss? Riding the bull or hitting the ground? All his depthless want and his stupid love and all that going-nowhere hope.

Comments

[coffeestudies]

bloody hell, no comment here?

i was overcome by a mighty excitement when i found this little piece of sweet bm-cake. then again, not so sweet..
for whatever reason there doesn't seem to be too much bm fics out there. wonder if it's for the lack of forbidden naughtyness when it's about utterly canon m/m...

If nothing else he wanted that pain to get feral and new again, instead of the old predictable ache, boring and excruciating as morning head.
gosh, love that line.

[dontwanttosaygb]

I am speechless and breathless. This is a very moving piece, and unfortunately I am having a very hard time getting my head around it right now to write anything that makes, sense and also to see through my watery eyes. I will try and comment more sensibly later.

Thank you, Ted

[bbm_citygirl]

Wow. This is one of the best things I have read in a really long time. You captured perfectly the concept of the heartache and slow torture of someone who is simultaneously watching their life pass them by and yet at the same time feeling trapped in place. It is so crushing that in a way death could be a form of release for Jack but given that Ennis could give him no more than what he does and given that Jack couldn't give Ennis up then what did they have to look forward to? How long could they drag themselves up before age and infirmity, bitterness and defeat took away what little they had?

You have an truly beautiful writing style, I thought this

Jack's body hummed and trembled for him and his heart did too, all of Jack throbbing and tumbling in the same uncertain direction, you, you. He felt dizzy and his chest ached. The fact of Ennis seemed to him miraculous, easily revoked.

was really lovely. I will be on the lookout for more of your work.

Recompense

[greatmtn]

Sashayed, a tough unsparing look at the suffering in the relationship between Ennis and Jack. The few times they met really did not make up for how much Jack wanted to be with Ennis. As Jack thought their meetings would get tougher on aging bodies. I do think you are a WOW(Wizard Of Words) and I hope you write more.

thanks

greatmtn

[jtsbar]

This is extraordinary and powerful writing. The originality and precision of your images and descriptions and insight into Jack and Ennis are just amazing. Thank you so very much for this. I'll be reading it over and over again.

How (with only the months, not the years, named, it makes is so clear that their time together is set apart, but still so vulnerable to the unnamed inexorable years) Jack and Ennis move from this :
It was a bright new thing, the mountain: like the July sun remade it every morning, whispering the columbines over it like unrolling a blanket, washing that brilliant blue across the sky and lifting the pines up slow like you might raise a barn. Sprawled in the long grass and wildflowers they were new, too

to this:
Ennis ran a hand over his chest. Jack felt his desolate heart straining towards that hand, thrumming radiantly, desperately, like the wingbeats of a trapped bird.

to this:
Ennis, who had been watching his face, said suddenly, "Hey." He kissed Jack on the forehead, and then on the mouth, with their old

[lampsh4de]

Pretty much ditto.

Christ. That was... fuck.

[lampsh4de]

Reading that hit me as hard as reading Brokeback Mountain. I can't remember the last time I cried while reading a fanfic.