Comments | sapphire_child: Fight for You IV

sapphire_child

Fight for You IV

Dec 23, 2007 22:25

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claire, charlie/claire, desmond, charlie, fanfiction, lost

Comments 13

jemmalynette December 23 2007, 14:33:54 UTC

Aw, how very sweet! This has got to be my favourite chapter so far! Their smiles and interactions to each other while they were down there were so cute. And I loved Charlie's snarky replies. Ken and Barbie indeed! lol.

sapphire_child December 23 2007, 14:39:42 UTC

Well it can't ALL be doom and gloom! I'm so pleased that you like the sweetness I've given them in this, even though their situation is so dire.

LOL. That was seriously the first thing I thought of and the idea of Charlie saying it? It just cracked me up.

Cheers for the review Jemm!

elliotsmelliot December 23 2007, 15:23:16 UTC

Another exciting chapter. I'm not usually a fan of stories that re-write existing scenes but this is done really well and different enough to keep it interesting. I liked Ben's response about Claire. Keep up the great work.

sapphire_child December 23 2007, 22:53:29 UTC

Thank you! Re-writing existing scenes can make for boring fic but I think I've added in enough differences to make it a bit more interesting and I'm glad that you think so too =)

falafel_fiction December 23 2007, 15:31:47 UTC

Hehe. I loved the Ken/Barbie joke! I've always been able to imagine Charlie saying something daft after Bonnie and Greta capture him. Your Greta was really cool. Looking forward to Desmond showing up!

sapphire_child December 23 2007, 23:05:13 UTC

Gotta love spur of the moment jokes when you're too busy panicking to think of anything good to say! Poor Charlie =P

I wanted to show more of Greta and Bonnie's character in this than we saw on the show. It's also interesting to see them through Claire's eyes as well - especially later on in the piece (you'll see what I mean when I post it)

Well we're at the halfway mark now so Desmond'll be there soon! I'm so glad that you're enjoying it so far!

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sapphire_child December 23 2007, 23:10:50 UTC

I just love how he's getting beaten up and yet he's still trying to reassure her that he's fine and not to worry *shakes head*

Ah Charlie...

summerrrain December 23 2007, 16:16:43 UTC

This was such a brilliant chapter! Awww I just loved Charlie and Claire's little smiles and laughs. :D It was so cute despite the situation that they're in! I can't wait to read more since again, you have me on the edge of my seat! Well done! :D

sapphire_child December 23 2007, 23:24:36 UTC

They're adorable aren't they? This is what C/C should have been like!

Well I'm about to post the next part so hang in there!