fic posting, the second

[samsom]

Here's the second part. I hope it follows in the same vein as part 1 because I have no plan for this story at all. I stayed up til 5 a.m. writing three pages, got up later in the morning and drank some coffee, read what I wrote, then deleted everything and started over. It's not long, but I got nothin' left right now but the urge to go out and do

Comments

[mph0506]

Oh, that last line is so chilling. I'm loving this so far! So many lines in this just touched me to the bone, particularly:

The soft tone of his voice has the hushed quality of a confessional.. just caters to my church!kink.

And: She is suddenly, frighteningly aware of how deep the water is around her head... What a lovely description of panic, so similar to drowning.

You write Cordelia and Angel so well, particularly in dark circumstances such as this one. A lot of times Cordy/Angel is written in a much lighter tone; it's refreshing to see this kind of spin on them. And your use of the vision/orgasm parallel is just fantastic. Hey, looks like I'm a perv too!

[samsom]

I've been dying to write orgasm/vision parallels for a looong time. Hee! Thank God for pervs. There should be, like, a play. Oh, wait. Thats why we have the interwebs.

I will not only cater to your church!kink, I will provide drinks and desserts as well. Those lines are some of my reworked ones, glad they stood out.

I would love to write lighter C/A and I think I came close with The Vampire, The Doctor...etc. but ::shakes head:: I don't know, they always veer off to the darkside within a few paragraphs so I guess that's my strength. So, so glad you're liking it!:D

[starlet2367]

:waggles eyebrows: Is it time for Part 3 yet?

[samsom]

I love that icon. I haven't seen DB in a church scene since Ats s2. I wonder if the Bones people know this, and exploit it shamelessly.

I'm sort of in the 'baking' stage of the third one, which is to say I've one idea. Heh. It, funny enough, involves a church scene.

::damns myself to hell::

[califi]

This chapter left me shaken. Gonna have to read it ovr a few times, as you kinda blindsided me, lol.

From the edning of the last, to him seeming to deflate at the beginning here... pulling away from her kiss... made me wonder if its only the visions that draw him, and not Cordelia.

I know I'm wrong right off: You are too filled with the C/A love,lol, so I will follow where you take me and put my lack of coherency in reading/feeding down to being short on sleep and rushing to grab the goodies before a week of self-imposed study.

*hugs*

[samsom]

Cali, you know me, I'd marry C/A if I could. Or, at the very least, have its babies. I'd never write anything to refute my ship.

You're concerned because he pulled away from her kiss. Don't be. When he shook against her shoulder, that was from wanting her and denying it. He's ashamed of his admission, and that's why he resisted it, because he didn't feel worthy of her right then.

[gabs186]

Ooh, this is phenomenal. As always ;o) I love how you've so successfully juxtaposed two elements of relationship and character - the darkness that so solidly lies between them and Cordelia's blind, unflinching trust and desire to console the most important person in her life. Angel's deepest, darkest, creepiest desires and then his need to pull away and protect her from the demon beneath the surface.

So, SO very good. Post more please? :o)

[samsom]

Thank you! You pretty much said all I'd hoped I'd get across with this. The second part was harder to write than I thought, I was so afraid I'd fall through the cracks trying to walk the line.

My biggest Angel/Cordy kink is their mutual dependency on each other - though it could be healthy (she lightens him up) I love to explore the darkside of that, and Pandora is one of my better efforts. Thanks for liking it and commenting.