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17 - Compost Mentis, R

Jul 18, 2008 10:53

Title: Compost Mentis
Author: andmydog
Warnings: None, really.
Pairing(s): Mama Sha/Daddy Sha
Notes: #17 - Insanity. 46 minutes.

( 'You must be', said the Cat, 'or you wouldn’t have come here.' )

challenge: (in)sanity, author:andmydog, rating:r

Comments 9

sharpeslass July 18 2008, 20:50:27 UTC

I like the way the timeline was fractured, almost in imitation of her mental state. All of the images were really evocative of heightened sensation as well. Just disconcerting.

I love the way you write. I truly, truly do. you have a gift for rendering happenings and mental states in a very oblique way that makes one think and then feel and, for myself, I find that once I start to feel your stories, the meanings really crystalize. There's almost an art to reading them and there's definitely artistry in the way they are written. You are super talented.

(Excellent Alice quote as well).

sharpeslass July 18 2008, 21:01:52 UTC

Me again. I forgot to tell you how brilliant your title was.

Also, when I stood up from reading this for some reason I kind of flashed back to the feelings I had the first time my heart was crushed. You captured that "fatal-attraction" crazy chick feeling so well that I remembered the way it felt myself (never, thank-god, to that extent, but I can see how women can go there). And when I say you captured it, you did it without overstating or making anything obvious. I'm not being very clear, I fear.
Sorry to keep babbling at you. *still in awe*

andmydog July 18 2008, 23:22:28 UTC

You... you just made my entire day, weekend, and a good chunk of next week. Thank you! Thank you so much. Wow.

cornerofmadness July 18 2008, 21:25:36 UTC

great title, this was a great twisted look into a fractured mind

andmydog July 18 2008, 23:23:22 UTC

Thank you! I always feel bad for Mama Sha. Sure she was crazy, but there had to be a reason for that, right?

cornerofmadness July 19 2008, 01:23:27 UTC

yes, it only stands to reason she wasn't always batshit crazy

jedishampoo July 19 2008, 00:00:26 UTC

An very heart-aching ride, so sharp and disturbing how you've shown her numbness and anger. Lovely how you let us see that Jien is the constant, what holds her when she needs it, because at one time she must have been happy and what does it take to get her back there? I make no sense, but then I've been in this woman's head now, thankyouverymuch. Mostly, I really love "cranberry silk." It seems to me that at one time she thought in colors other than just "red." Awesome. :)

theskywasblue July 19 2008, 02:49:06 UTC

Wow...that was shocking and sad and an amazing look into a broken mind. Fabulous! It absolutely gave me shivers. It's so rare to see Mama-Sha fics, but you did this one wonderfully