Taking Wing (Challenge #9: Magic; Nii Jianyi [Ukoku] - PG)

[opalmatrix]

Title: Taking Wing
Author: opalmatrix
Warnings: A bit disgusting to anyone sensitive to the idea of dead, rotting things. However, PG at most - work safe
Pairing(s): n/a
Spoilers: a bit about Ukoku Sanzo
Notes: saiyuki_time challenge #9: Magic. Time given: 1 hour. Time taken: 65 minutes, I think. There were many interruptions. This owes

Comments

[sanada]

oooh, that was creeeeepy!! I like how you write Ukoku a little unhinged, and that's an interesting speculation... he definitely has that feral side!

[opalmatrix]

Hee, you're here! (I'd love your opinion on any of the others if you have the time.)

This was just an attempt to answer why he's always showing up leagues and leagues from Houtou, surrounded by cawing crows: "What the hell do crows and the Muten Sutra have in common?"

> hugs! <

[theskywasblue]

Creepy...and good.
Very interesting, I really like this idea a lot (and your characterization of Nii/Ukoku was spot on I think!)

[opalmatrix]

What's funny is that I'm usually pretty grossed out about stuff like that, but when I was writing him, I wasn't ... creepy for me too!

Thanks!

[thetoastalchmst]

But the tears that streamed from his eyes didn't stop when the laughter finally ceased.

Oh maaan... that was really deep. .__.; This entire thing just made you think, you know? It was written very well, and I admire your descriptive word patterns. =3 Good stuff!

*shudders*

It was still a bit on the creepy side, though. XD

[opalmatrix]

Awww, thank you! Yeah, sorry about the creepiness - but he's like that, unfortunately!

[louiselux]

How fitting!

Ha! Oh, Ukoku. I like very much how you describe his creepy enthusiasm for controlling decay and then discovery of the maggot and its simple nature, which is something so alien to him. I really loved that moment, and that he cries too, and helplessly. It's very effective.

[opalmatrix]

I think your recent long Ukoku piece started me off in the right frame of mind for this! The world is Nii's laboratory, and everyone else is an experimental animal ... except, I think, Koumyou and Sanzo.

Thank you!

[cicer]

Oooh. I really liked this. I think you did a great job of getting into Ukoku's warped mind. All of his thoughts and motivations really rang true to me, and that's difficult to achieve with such a wily character. I also really like the concept of Ukoku using his crows to gather information and act as spies. It makes sense to me, because often he does seem to know things that he shouldn't have any way of knowing. I like this theory!

[opalmatrix]

Thank you! I'm glad it makes sense! It seems that he really wants to be dominated and defeated, and yet no one seems to be able to do so. It occurs to me that his parents must have been ace fuck-ups ... (another plot point for another day, I guess).