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Life and Death, Sanzo, G

Apr 09, 2008 21:56

Title: Life and Death
Author: Kubaru Suki
Prompt: #4, Opposites
Time: 23:32

Notes: Though I don't respond to each comment left, please know that I cherish every one of them and they never fail to make me go 'eee!' and flail a little bit.

( Life and Death )

char:sanzo, challenge:opposites, author:kubaru_suki, rating:g

Comments 6

eyesofshinigami April 10 2008, 03:30:42 UTC

Oh, now that was all kinds of beautiful. <3

The flow of this was so poetic, so smooth, that it was an incredibly easy read without being over quick. This is going to stay with me for a while. Your language was just so...I don't even know. This was a very, very enjoyable read.

I liked what you did with the prompt, most definitely. It was an interesting look into young Sanzo, and I think you did a marvelous job. <3 Thanks for sharing that with us!

kambeiadaro April 10 2008, 05:56:45 UTC

This was very beautiful. I enjoyed the way you have Sanzo gather the strength to go on.

louiselux April 10 2008, 10:32:26 UTC

Oh, this is very good, and an interesting moment to explore. Sanzo's thoughts give this a strong flow. The sense of his regained strength and composure is really powerful.

purpleicicles April 10 2008, 21:04:11 UTC

Yes, yes, YES!!! Sanzo finding his inner resolution, his strength, is fantastically written, and the mistake of thinking his reflection was his master is both heartbreaking and strengthening at the same time! Thank you! XD

macavitykitsune April 12 2008, 17:27:45 UTC

Interesting that you used the word 'tilaka' - it's a very Indian word for the dot. I loved the flow of this fic - stories that use italics to convey thoughts can go horribly wrong, but this had that icy precise self-loathing that Kouryuu must have felt at that moment.

"He doesn't look as young as he is. He doesn't look as old as he feels." What a lovely sentence. And the comparison to Koumyou, who is the precise opposite, was exactly right for the next line.

kubaru_suki April 13 2008, 03:39:21 UTC

Thank you so much! As for 'tilaka' it's the only word I know for the religious chakara mark (and 'bindi' for the decorative mark women wear). If you know the word that they'd use in China, I wouldn't mind knowing! But, more than anything, thank you so much for the sweet review.