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Ripples in the Water | Gojun & Kenren | G

Mar 29, 2008 13:00

Title: Ripples in the Water
Characters: Gojun & Kenren
Warnings: None
Notes: For prompt #2, "unexplored territory." Written in 40 minutes.

( Ripples in the Water )

char:goujun, author:athena8, char:kenren, challenge:unexplored territory, rating:g

Comments 32

kubaru_suki March 29 2008, 17:51:53 UTC

That is just...cute. Gojun taking a break is one of those great ideas and then to have him skip stones with Kenren. Of course, I can't help thinking that Tenpou shows up just as Gojun's stone sinks. This was just a fun read.

athena8 March 30 2008, 04:07:30 UTC

Lol! That would have been quite an amusing ending indeed, if Tenpou shows up right then. I wonder if Gojun would glare at Kenren, thinking he planned it out that way? *grins* Thanks for reading!

lillypuff March 29 2008, 17:56:30 UTC

Love this! Two of my favorite boys trying to play nice with each other ;) I can just picture Goujun skipping stones, even dragons need some relaxation now and again. Great job!

athena8 March 30 2008, 04:10:22 UTC

Hee~ I like to think they get along *once* in a while! Glad you liked it! Thanks for your comment. ♥

erinmacha March 29 2008, 18:34:22 UTC

I liked this! I don't know if you did it on purpose, but there were several double meanings in here.

First, maybe not quite a double meaning, but the 'eastern' wind beckoning Gojun to come and play...then he just happens to meet up with Kenren - who was transferred from the eastern army. I like it.

The other two, I won't go into too much detail explaining why I found them amusing (be assured there are pervy reasons for it though):

He leaned in closer still and chuckled beside Gojun's ear- "Look, I promise I won't tell anyone if you suck."

and

He pointedly ignored the widening grin on Kenren's face as he turned toward the water to toss his stone.

athena8 March 30 2008, 04:14:19 UTC

The eastern wind was definitely on purpose! X) ♥

As for the others...lol! I guess if you take it out of context, the first line in particular can be pervy indeed. *grin* As for the second, I think a widening grin on Kenren's face could be taken in the perverted sense in many situations! XD

mainekosama March 29 2008, 19:46:46 UTC

This was so sweet! It was nice to see a different (but not too diferent ;-)) side to Goujun.

athena8 March 30 2008, 04:15:49 UTC

Thanks! And yeah, Gojun needs to step out once in a while, huh? ^__~ ♥

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athena8 March 30 2008, 04:20:23 UTC

Thank you! ♥

I was almost afraid he wouldn't give in before my 40 minutes were up! Much to my relief, he decided to be cooperative in the end, lol.