Comments | saiyuki_time: Subtlety (#79, Hakkai/Sanzo, PG 13)

the_rotten1 in saiyuki_time

Subtlety (#79, Hakkai/Sanzo, PG 13)

May 29, 2010 00:48

Title: Subtlety
Author: the_rotten1
Rating: PG 13
Pairing(s): Hakkai/Sanzo
Notes: Mind Games. Time allowed: 30 min. Time taken: 29, before corrections. (Btw, what does it take to get a tag as an author here?)

( Sometimes even the wait itself counted as foreplay. )

challenge: mind games, author:the_rotten1, pair:hakkai/sanzo, rating:pg-13

Comments 13

lawless523 May 29 2010, 08:11:33 UTC

Well done for a first time. Then again, I'm pretty new to these things too, though I a run of them recently. I particularly like the second and third to last lines.

P.S. I love your icon.

the_rotten1 May 29 2010, 16:39:53 UTC

Actually, I've done two or three of these before. It's just been awhile.

I'm very fond of making jokes out of Sanzo's death threats.

lawless523 May 29 2010, 22:54:38 UTC

I thought the ikkou had figured out that Sanzo's death threats were mostly jokes idle threats to begin with. XD

btw, the way to get a tag is to PM one of the mods who post the challenges and ask for one. That's how I got mine; it's not automatic.

p.s. I didn't notice this when I read it, but check the title. I think you meant 'subtlety'.

the_rotten1 May 29 2010, 23:01:07 UTC

Agreed.

Ah, I didn't know I was supposed to PM the mods. It seems like one of them caught my entry, though. So I have one now. Yay! And I already went back and tagged all of my previous entries, so they should be easier to find.

Damn, I did not even notice the typo. Okay, fixed.

suanz May 29 2010, 09:12:20 UTC

Nice!!! Just right to satisfy my recent cravings for 83. ^___^

the_rotten1 May 29 2010, 16:41:20 UTC

There's actually been quite a bit of it out lately, I've noticed. Not that I'm complaining. =3

curiousleaves May 29 2010, 14:27:51 UTC

Love Hakkai's last line!

the_rotten1 May 29 2010, 16:42:19 UTC

Thank you.

jedishampoo May 30 2010, 15:57:55 UTC

"Just a little." ;) Nicely subtle in a way that echoes the title-- and Hakkai is a perfectly calculating bastard, here, heh.

Though I think for the title you mean "Subtlety?" With just one more "t." :)

the_rotten1 May 30 2010, 18:36:42 UTC

Yes, I have been practicing writing him as a calculating bastard for the Constrained Desire re-write.

Ah, I could've sworn I fixed that already. :(

jinxaire May 31 2010, 01:50:36 UTC

Hakkai's rather good at wearing Sanzo down, isn't he? ;-) Also loved that "Just a little" of Hakkai's.

the_rotten1 May 31 2010, 03:24:13 UTC

Sanzo is not a patient person. There's a limit to how much of any given annoyance he can stand. And that includes sexual frustration.