Title: As Flowers that Bloom
Author: opalmatrix
Warnings: mild m/m
Pairing(s): Gojyo/Hakkai, Sanzo/Goku
Spoilers: mild for Reload 9
Notes: written for
saiyuki_time, Challenge #68, Bloom; time allowed: 45 minutes; time taken: 65 minutes. I'm not sure how well this hangs together. (And clearly I need to think of this as a Wednesday deadline now
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I thought it hung together well. My only comment would be about the beginning, where it wasn't always clear who was doing or saying what because the adjectives describing them kept changing.
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Ack, springkink got me all distracted from keeping up here ... .
Yes, the mix-up with the OCs (I'm tempted to call them "NPCs" as one would in a roleplaying game) is the sort of thing that smillaraaq would make me straighten out in a beta'ed fic.
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I think Hakkai and Gojyo did fine - the noise woke them up after they had drowsed off in post-coital bliss.
Thanks for reading!
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Sorry this is so late! I'm glad you liked this!
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Thanks for sharing!
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(Late late comment response ... )
I'm only just coming to terms with the idea Goku's having a sex life! Luckily, Minekura-sensei has been subtly showing him as looking older, bit by bit.
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(Sorry this response is so late!)
Hee, I hadn't thought of the connection with "getting lucky!" Let's blame it on my subconscious. Thanks for reading!
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See, I told you I'd get around to 393 ... OK, no, this doesn't really count. I need to write you something real sometime, from the POV of Goku or Sanzo. I'm hoping that sensei will continue to show Goku looking older, bit by bit. It's beena big help to me in imagining Goku with a sex life.
I'm glad you enjoyed this, in the meantime.
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