Subject: #55: R and R, Hakkai/Gojyo, PG-13

[samsarapine]

Title: R and R
Author: samsarapine
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: Some bad language and some (non-explicit) hot action.
Pairing: Hakkai/Gojyo, though mainly ikkou gen
Notes: Challenge 55: write a story that is dialogue only. 40 minutes allowed. 45 minutes taken, I'm afraid, plus five minutes to read it over and decide to give it to you rough. Er, in rough draft

Comments

[clytemnaestra]

"Yeah, I deserve a vacation. Stop poking me, Gojyo."

LOL! This was great! I loved the interactions between the four of them, they were spot-on and entirely distinct. Great job!

[suanz]

"I'm sure Sanzo works very hard. Probably. Perhaps. Maybe, at times."

Ha Ha Ha... That's a good one. We all know Sanzo is a lazy prima donna.

[purpleicicles]

Brilliant characterisation! All-dialogue fics are so hard to do when you want the characters to be recognized, but you got it just right! Sanzo accusing Jeep of pouting made me laugh, but the ending was the best bit by far! X3

[nouvellebrielle]

Oh. -dies of laughter-

I've got so many favourite bits in this, I'm not even sure where I laughed the hardest. I do have a stomachache now, though. XD

"You don't take vacations while you're on a quest, moron."

"Why not? It's a free world."

I really love how you managed to capture all the personalities perfectly, just by dialogue. Extremely well done!

"Because we've got a fucking prima donna for a car."

And I've decided on this line, really. Mostly because I can't stop seeing Jeep Sanzo on an opera stage playing the traumatised ingenue. Thanks for sharing!

[caeseria]

This was hilarious! I had no problem telling everyone apart, as they are so distinct in the way you wrote them, and IC. Loved this, so well done! ♥