Newbie + fanfictions

[lucre_noin]

Hi : D I'm new in this community.
I'm Italian and I have been a Saint Seiya fan for many years. However, only now I'm discovering the fandom and I'm starting to write fanfictions.
I usually write in Italian and it's the first time I write in English so, please, if you notice errors of any sort write to me ;_; (I'd need a beta...).

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[phoenix_anca]

Oho, Milo and Camus are sweet~. Alcor and Mizar - well, I watched the Asgard arc, but I never really thought of them like this. ( Saga and Kanon, that I've heard of. X3 )

If you'd like, I could beta these for you.

[lucre_noin]

Thank you é*è you'd made me a happy writer

[phoenix_anca]

Since I'm still awake, I can do it now~. *doesn't want to sleep after reading scary stories*

I'll just copy and paste, and then bold things I correct/suggest, since these are so short. That might work well:

Milo had never been a particularly kind or quiet person. Usually people reproached him for his sharp, blunt ways, for he was used to speaking his mind without thinking too much.
"Camus, I've fallen in love with you." [That's the usual way to put it! I kind of like the original though.]
Camus raised an eyebrow, confused.
Unlike the scorpion, Camus was famous for his patience. He was used to thinking before speaking and sometimes people said he thought too much. He weighed the words in his head, and tried them again and again because the last thing he wanted was to be misunderstood. He was a born diplomat. [Both words should work, but I think "diplomat" is what you might want here.]
"Camus, I don't have the whole morning. I am in love with you and now I'm going kiss you. You don't want it, you can stop me," Milo said, irritated

[phoenix_anca]

*I hope the suggestions are okay