Shame

[ariadnem]

Title : Shame
Challenge : #8 What if?
Characters : Camus
Word count : 146

Comments

[scorpioyue]

As I already told you, it's horribly sad and beautifully written. *cries*

[ariadnem]

dont cry, please...*hugs*

I'm glad you've liked it ^^

[undertheice]

Agh. :( What a sad what if. You did a good job though, you have a really good way to "getting the message across" even in a few lines. Nice drabble! ^^

[ariadnem]

*blush*

Thanks :D

*hides*

[december_star]

Oh, poor Camus, poor Hyoga :( Nicely written!

[ariadnem]

Thank you ^^

[milosflaca]

niiiice *bows to the master*

[ariadnem]

Master??? Where?? Where??

*faints*

[muinteor]

How would the whole series have changed if this scene had actually happened the way you wrote it.

Regrets, duty, resignation... a warrior observes his fallen opponent, but Camus manages to remain distant even in mourning.

Death is the third character in this story, one can almost imagine the spectral figure waiting for Camus to finish his moment of homage and reflection, and take Hyoga's soul.

All this in only 146 words... impressive.

[ariadnem]

Impressive?? not at all. Yours is. I've always told you how much I love the way you write (needless to say the way you use the language)

How do you manage to see so many things in my stories that I never see? I told scorpioyue about that before, I never see such emotions, nor I see if things fit or don't. I just write and enyoy doing it.

*sigh*

I wish I had more technique, or knew more about it at least, but all I'm doing is learning by doing. I guess after all (and takin' into account am a teacher) I'm an empirical learner...hhehhe