Decision

Jul 28, 2005 21:53

Title : Decision
Challenge : #8 What if?
Characters : Mainly Saga
Word count : 395
Warning : Character death. Just in case...

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08, challenge, saga, scorpioyue

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ariadnelabys July 29 2005, 03:01:46 UTC
Love this one "I can’t hate you for being weak," I think this is the first time I see this response on a fic. A perfect statement for such a sorrowful moment.

Loved it, Dearest.

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scorpioyue July 29 2005, 03:07:12 UTC
Thank you! :D

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december_star July 29 2005, 06:59:28 UTC
Oh! I don't think Saga's weak, he has made a choice and does it the hard way. He takes his own life to spare that of others. This is beautiful!

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scorpioyue July 29 2005, 15:56:38 UTC
In my mind, Shion told him that because he thought Saga was going to kill him, so he didn't suspect Saga was going to kill himself. But I guess it could work the other way too. :)

Thank you! :D

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milosflaca July 29 2005, 13:02:41 UTC
Saga smiled and whispered a goodbye before feeling the cold sharpness of the metal trespassing his heart, and bringing him peace.

Setting him free.
like the ending a lot. It just sent shivers through my spine.congrats!

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scorpioyue July 29 2005, 15:57:29 UTC
Oooh, shivers! That's such a compliment, thank you! :D

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ghaidin July 29 2005, 16:43:06 UTC
"And still... there’s no hatred?" Poor Saga, so confused, so hurt, so brave! Shion's comment strikes me as a bit condescending *dodges stones*

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scorpioyue July 29 2005, 17:04:07 UTC
Don't worry, no stones for you! :D I always like to know what works and what doesn't. Thank you!

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ghaidin July 29 2005, 18:55:50 UTC
Oh, no! Ididn't mean it like that! I did like it! And the fic makes sense...instead of guilt taking over at the end of sanctuary battles, it wins over before evil can completely take over.
My comment was directed to Shion's taking of Saga's misery. If you're the Pope and one of your gold saints crawls into your room in such turmoil (and ends up killing himself, on top of it) it seems a bit harsh to call him weak.

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scorpioyue July 29 2005, 20:41:29 UTC
Hehehe! I did understand you liked it because of your comments about Saga, so don't worry. ^^

About Shion's comment, this is what I had in mind: Shion was sure that Saga was there to kill him, so he talks about being weak in the sense that Saga's evil side has won. (In the past I wrote a version of this event with Shion's POV, where there was this idea of weakness too.) But since it's a 'what if' fic, there's a twist in the story, one that Shion hadn't anticipated: Saga takes his own life to prevent all the misery.

And this 'hatred' Saga speaks of, refers to the idea that Saga knows that Shion thinks he's there to kill him. Er... I'm not sure if I'm making any sense, sorry. ^^;

I could have included Shion's reaction but since it was in Saga's POV... But I can assure you Shion would have been more than mildly surprised. ;)

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