Comments | safiersephiroth: This is rough, very rough and incomplete. Ed might die at the end.

safiersephiroth

This is rough, very rough and incomplete. Ed might die at the end.

Jan 27, 2008 20:48

Ed was a normal guy. Well, not a normal guy as most people would think of a normal guy. With the 6 billion people on this planet, Ed shared not many a common circumstance. No, Ed was a normal guy only in the way that Americans use the term "normal guy." But even this usage neglects every African, Chicano, Mongolian, homosexual, handicap, anarchist ( Read more... )

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jesuisyacki January 28 2008, 02:03:53 UTC

is this you eight years from now?
poor, poor soul.

Ed's thirty something... safiersephiroth January 28 2008, 02:07:03 UTC

...so I've got more than eight years before I start churning out ridiculous Christmas cards.

I like Ed. dayremer January 28 2008, 02:06:44 UTC

You capture elegantly and efficiently the white, suburban American. I want more on his family. (Why are they not in the Christmas card with Ed and ChOwChOw?) Last line is perfect. I say he should die of auto-erotic asphyxiation.

mute_nation January 29 2008, 06:07:00 UTC

something ticks me about the first line
something something
maybe the whole thing
ill think about it

Think about it! safiersephiroth January 30 2008, 04:59:37 UTC

Do it!

Re: Think about it! mute_nation February 2 2008, 17:52:47 UTC

the first paragraph doesnt really seem like you.. but i hesitate to say anything because i would like to see how the second/third draft goes
the language, the way you use it.. doesnt sound like your voice..

but ed reminds me of some of the guys in this bbc doc on real dolls, if you havent see it from when i posted the link a long time ago
http://bunchofnerds.com/2007/07/video/ahhhhhh-real-dolls-documentary-creeps-us-out/