Comments | saeva: Fic: You're Not The Girl You Think You Are; SGA; Teyla-centric

saeva

Fic: You're Not The Girl You Think You Are; SGA; Teyla-centric

Jun 30, 2006 04:32

Title: You're Not The Girl You Think You Are
Summary: Sometimes life leads you in directions that you can't understand; other times, you end up exactly where you need to be. For important things, it's usually a little of both. // "Everything is good for you if it doesn't kill you."
Author's Notes: For bantha_fodder in the Teyla Ficathon. Beta-ed by the ( Read more... )

stargate: atlantis, fiction

Comments 13

tielan June 30 2006, 12:36:45 UTC

I like the mystery of it. How you've layered it, detail upon detail. The story twisted my brain into knots as I was trying to work out what the deal was with Atrela - and the idea that Wraith scientists kept experimenting on their food is really intriguing - how far would it have gone?

The fact that Teyla feels Atrela's need to survive and to some degree sympathises it is an interesting one: on one level she doesn't want to identify with the Wraith, but she does all the same.

I really, really liked this. Thanks for writing it! (And write more, please? *huge begging eyes*)

saeva June 30 2006, 13:57:06 UTC

Damn you and your sequel encouraging abilities. I have a thought. I don't need a thought. *stamps feet in your general direction*

But, seriously, glad you liked it and you're still welcome to come back and comment more if you have more to say when you're not, like, ten minutes from bed. *grins* Otherwise, see you around on IM.

- Andrea.

bantha_fodder June 30 2006, 12:56:51 UTC

This is really fantastic. I love the layers and the light touches of Rodney and Ronon within the story, and the heavier touches of John, and this Teyla is so awesome and the mystery was a little confusing at first reveal but fabulous when you fully revealed what had happened.

And yes. I really like this! Thank you so much.

saeva June 30 2006, 13:55:05 UTC

Thank you!

This took forever and ever to write because I kept going back to re-read "The Future, Frameless in Design" to get inspiration as that fic is about fifty types of awesome. Also because it kept getting longer. Jesus. I mean, there's worse ways to be distracted but the longer was killing me. *grins*

But I'm really glad you liked it, and liked the touches of Rodney and Ronon (I snuck in siblingship there, I really did, go me), and John. Because John/Teyla owns all sort of owned things. Also, Teyla is also fifty types of awesome so writing her as awesome was totally not hard. ... And, it's possible I should have been in bed an hour ago.

I'm really glad you liked the whole mystery part and didn't find it too confusing because it sort of just jumbled out and I didn't do enough to go back and clean it up because I didn't want to delay the fic further. Also, that you didn't hate the OC. Because some people do. Hate OCs, I mean. It's always a risk, especially since she was sort of pivotal to the plot ( ... )

bantha_fodder June 30 2006, 23:48:52 UTC

That's pretty funny, that you were using a Dune fic for inspiration for this.

And John/Teyla owns everything, it's true. Your rambling definitely shows the way you should have been in bed but it's okay, I liked your OC too.

shusu June 30 2006, 21:17:53 UTC

I've been trying all day to come up with a cogent comment to this, but I doubt it'll get any clearer... so here's a try.

I *really* like this premise. In the front end it moves more slowly than one would expect for a sudden-twist plot but we're too busy being enthralled by the interior of Teyla's thoughts, her assessment of the situation. The twist itself is fascinating -- many of the reactions to the second season's closing arcs came on a little too strong. This is more like Twelve Things They (Will Someday) Say in the Pegasus Galaxy, a glancing blow that covers so much just in Atrela's realizing that it's not so simple from Beckett's end ( ... )

norabombay June 30 2006, 22:25:50 UTC

First, I really like the story.

Second? I love that song. A lot. To the point where I actually registered notthegirl.net.

Somehow it and Instinct managed to be two of the best CH songs ever, despite being almost throwawy tracks on the hits cd..

mrshamill July 1 2006, 00:50:15 UTC

Fascinating and fabulous, an idea I wish I'd thought of!

The odd structure really just enhanced the entire mystery about it. Teyla's POV was so very in character and the reveal of what Atrela was (and how she was and what she was 'made' for) absolutely stunned me - it came out of left field. Then her needing to go 'feed' just made the whole thing creepier.

Bits that stood out for me:

One of these times, she thinks as she washes the grime off her body and prepares to return with John to the other side, they will learn the folly of their lack of caution.Yes yes YES. I often feel that Teyla is thinking this as she gives that pitying look to whoever is fucking up royally this time. Teyla being sick to her stomach as she realizes exactly how close she is to Atrela made me wince in sympathy ( ... )