Before We Die

[rytings]

Title: VIII. Before We Die
Series: Variations on The First Kiss
Characters: Baralai, Gippal
Rating: PG-13
Warnings/Notes: Part of a series of drabbles/ficlets about the various ways that Gippal and Baralai might have shared their first kiss.

VIII.
The Crimson Squad candidates had been talking. They called this cave the “den of woe”. They said that this

Comments

[papercutperfect]

Gah, if only it didn't stop there >.<

Fantastic, as usual. I just adore your writing, and I especially love your Baralai. Gippal too, of course, but you make Baralai so damn cute ^____^

[iamleaper]

You could make it keep going. ;)

I'm glad that you like Baralai! I feel very comfortable with Gippal, but I'm glad to know my Baralai is acceptable. =)

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[kunstarniki]

It seems to me I have heard Gippal's argument before, somewhere, sometime, ....
I am delighted that you have solved the mutual attraction dilemma. And this is a particularly chewy one. I think you have found your metier! Hurrah! ;)

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[iamleaper]

It's a familiar one, isn't it?

I'm glad you like it. If only I could get paid for doing such things!

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[kunstarniki]

It is a line so many lads perfect. LOL

Why not try sending some short pieces out to various magazines? Florence King (a delightful author who wrote "Southern Ladies and Gentlemen", amongst other tomes) got her start writing true confessions for romance mags. Your B/G, under different names, might find a happy home in one of the many gay-themed publications. Can't hurt to try. ;)

[gysecune]

“What if we pretend we’re soldiers,” he said, putting his hands on Gippal’s shoulders, “who have spent every waking hour for weeks together, and who have realized they’re attracted to each other? What if we pretend that we just want to know each other this way too, before we both die?” Oooh, that was awesome. I really like the way you ended it, too.

[rytings]

=) I'm glad you liked that line. I struggled with it for quite some time.

I wanted to go farther with the ending, but then I remembered that I'm only writing kisses here. It can be up to someone else to finish the tale. ;)

[dior_anghel]

The ending was perfect, of course - "their bodies tangling in the dust" - giving such beautiful imagery...

...and Dior would love you forever (in a totally non-creepy way) if you maybe continued? (Not in this story officially, but wrote the full version and posted it seperately?)

...=D?

[raserei_hojo]

“Tch, Lai, you’re not gonna die,” Gippal informed him.
“And why not?”
“You haven’t had sex yet-“
“-where did you hear that?”
“-and virgins can’t die.”

Pure genius. XD