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[ryagelle]

Dear Dr. McCoy:

I want to pass my CompTIA Network+ exam when this class is over. This means you need to come to class and teach it. Thank you. >_>

Also, upgraded to a paid account and changed my journal theme again. I now have a little pet octopus that has a little pet seahorse. SO MUCH BETTER OMG. Why didn't I do this earlier?

AND: I post first

Comments

[d_lueth]

*pets*

It's okay Ratchet. The Twins shatter Professionalism with their mere presence and you're not immune only Prowl is!

[ryagelle]

Heh, it's true. The twins do a great many things that induce unprofessional behavior in poor Ratchet ^__^

[velvet_infinity]

YYYYEEEEEEE XDDD Dear Primus I've loved this story FOREVER!! I'm so glad you're going back to it and adding on!! I'm so excited!

Will there be moar 0.0

*petropuppy eyes for the win!*

[ryagelle]

XDDD Well, so far there are four chapters written and under minor revision, and a rough beginning of a fifth, so there should be more fairly soon. ^_^

[darkeyes_17]

I went back to the original and I compared the two and I have to say you show such a growth in writing between the two versions. This one flows better, but the old one is still as fantastic as ever.

And....woot! New contributor! *glomps* Great work.

[ryagelle]

Thank you so much! I am very very fond of the original, but I think this newer version is definitely something I needed to write, if only for myself XDD

[cmdrtekk]

When one first considers and begins a rewrite it is important to remember that more words do not always improve a story. Many times it is a tricky line to walk. Especially when the first version was as well written to begin with as yours was. Often, less words convey more.

That being said, I see where some of the additional wording in this opening set did indeed at times work for fleshing out the scene, but otehrs also seemed more of a hindrance to the overall flow.

I wish you the best in your personal rewrite experiment - as you have called this - and would enjoy seeing more.

Once again, thank you for sharing.

[ryagelle]

*nodnod* that's a good part of why I've been waffling so long on doing this, and still am not releasing it as an official rewrite. It's difficult to strike a balance, but I'm hoping that this will serve as a useful learning tool as well as reflecting the characters more accurately as they exist in my headspace. ^^

[playswithworms]

EEEEEEEE!!! :D

[ryagelle]

XDDDDDDDDDD