That was my first time writing Team Hebi so, heh, nervousness. Glad it came out all right.
Writing this was a very odd experience, because NaruSakuSasu is my OT3 and I was cheering for them and getting them exactly where I thought they'd be best, and at the same time Ino was really hurting. ...It was weird.
I. You. You continued it. Ohgod. And here I thought it hurt to read the first part... B-but this part was just amazingly delisciously painful. Your Ino is amazing, although I have to say that you've almost done a too good job in describing how confused she is over the things she does and feels, because I get confused as well, while reading.
hello_scorpling is going to love it, I know she will. I actually stayed at her place from friday to saturday, and we talked about your Ino and the fact that you'd said you'd write her something for her birthday. She said she barely dared to hope for it, that offering to write her something had been enough... she's going to be thrilled beyong belief when seeing this ♥
No, no don't change anything! The confusion added to the feeling, made one feel closer to Ino and helped me to understand her. Plus I think that it's mostly about your way to write, and that's your style, which I absolutely love and don't want you to go around changing just because I'm stupid X'D
made one feel closer to Ino and helped me to understand her.
You have NO IDEA how long I spent bashing my head against various hard surfaces because Ino needed to be kept confused and at the same time the reader needed to have SOME IDEA of what was going on. ...Of course Ino was in denial, so that helped.
The best Ino fic I've read so far. And even though I'm a Sasu/Naru fan, I couldn't help but root for Ino. Ino/Saku had never looked so appealing before.
I know where you come from - but actually, NaruSasu is one of my favourite ships to sideship InoSaku. And this is coming from someone who OT3s Team Seven.
Ino wondered about the accuracy of her translation; ‘Fine! Have it your way, then, and stop messing with my already crumbling-at-the-top walls of stoicism, you forward freak!’
AHAHAHAHAHA. You characterize Ino beautifully; her thoughts are just so her. And the Team 7 interaction!--I love the scene where Naruto and Sasuke are haggling over the time period, and when they're all sleeping together. :D And Hebi was hilarious; the Suigetsu-Karin bickering never fails to amuse me, and Juugo was just awwwwww. They're so much a warped version of Team 7 that it's really quite interesting to see the contrast.
And Ino! I never disliked her, although I was always a little meh, but--well, I think it'd be hard to find someone who writes her as well as you do. :D
That sentence was completely Sasuke's declaring his love. You know it.
Aw, I'm glad you liked! I'd never written Team Hebi before, so I wasn't too sure I wasn't mangling them too horribly, but I think the NaruSakuSasu-ness of the piece seeped into their interaction. Or SuiKa, at least.
The NaruSasu bickering scene was very fun to write. The three of them are just always fliiiirting.
Ino's one of my favourite characters - thank you! :D
Oh INO. Oh INO. I just... I just... you write her heart-break and her dilemma and the fact that she risked so much and loved so hard and hard everything thrown back in her face so damn much...
Oh Ino. My heart is breaking for her here. Maybe she would have been better off with psychotic Itachi after all. ::sob::
SECRET: Ino has still not caught up on the fact that she doesn't merely love Sakura, she's in love with her. Which is why she's still rather confused and doesn't entirely understand what she's feeling. And which may also be the only thing saving her from utter meltdown.
INO IS A CLUELESS HERO.
*snerk* Can Ino's pimpiness overwhelm Itachi's asexuality? (hum, possibly aside from Sasuke and Kisame?)
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That was my first time writing Team Hebi so, heh, nervousness. Glad it came out all right.
Writing this was a very odd experience, because NaruSakuSasu is my OT3 and I was cheering for them and getting them exactly where I thought they'd be best, and at the same time Ino was really hurting. ...It was weird.
:D!
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hello_scorpling is going to love it, I know she will. I actually stayed at her place from friday to saturday, and we talked about your Ino and the fact that you'd said you'd write her something for her birthday. She said she barely dared to hope for it, that offering to write her something had been enough... she's going to be thrilled beyong belief when seeing this ♥
Thank you for the wonderful read!
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o_o Y-you spoke about that? *b-blushes* Yay, she wrote me an e-mail to tell me she liked it, actually.
I'm very glad you liked - er, if there's anything I can do with the confusing parts?...
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You have NO IDEA how long I spent bashing my head against various hard surfaces because Ino needed to be kept confused and at the same time the reader needed to have SOME IDEA of what was going on. ...Of course Ino was in denial, so that helped.
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Anyway, glad you liked!
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AHAHAHAHAHA. You characterize Ino beautifully; her thoughts are just so her. And the Team 7 interaction!--I love the scene where Naruto and Sasuke are haggling over the time period, and when they're all sleeping together. :D And Hebi was hilarious; the Suigetsu-Karin bickering never fails to amuse me, and Juugo was just awwwwww. They're so much a warped version of Team 7 that it's really quite interesting to see the contrast.
And Ino! I never disliked her, although I was always a little meh, but--well, I think it'd be hard to find someone who writes her as well as you do. :D
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Aw, I'm glad you liked! I'd never written Team Hebi before, so I wasn't too sure I wasn't mangling them too horribly, but I think the NaruSakuSasu-ness of the piece seeped into their interaction. Or SuiKa, at least.
The NaruSasu bickering scene was very fun to write. The three of them are just always fliiiirting.
Ino's one of my favourite characters - thank you! :D
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Oh INO. Oh INO. I just... I just... you write her heart-break and her dilemma and the fact that she risked so much and loved so hard and hard everything thrown back in her face so damn much...
Oh Ino. My heart is breaking for her here. Maybe she would have been better off with psychotic Itachi after all. ::sob::
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INO IS A CLUELESS HERO.
*snerk* Can Ino's pimpiness overwhelm Itachi's asexuality? (hum, possibly aside from Sasuke and Kisame?)
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