[Naruto] Things that could have happened had Hizashi been the older son - 8

[runespoor7]

Title: Things that could have happened had Hizashi been the older son. (or: a cage is a cage is a curse, dammit.)
Author: runespoor7
Rating: PG-13
Summary: series of unrelated drabbles/fics on the AU premise stated in the title.
Notes: meh.

[I have done a dvd commentary of this fic here.]

previously: 1 2 3 4 5 6 7

Comments

[mariagoner]

Heh heh heh. Awesome. Seeing the scrappy underdog take out the favored on never fails to make my heart flutter, especially when said scrappy underdog is Hinata!

And oh, I adore what you do with Hinata here. It's clear that she's an exceptional kunoichi but her low-self-esteem is ever in prevalence, even in this universe (though you do a great job justifying it.) I love how she's like-- 'I only win 40% of my matches against Sasuke! I'm awful!' So funny and sweet and sad, that.

And the crush that Sasuke has on her is seriously adorable and-- even better-- appropriate! I have a guilty love for quite a few Sasuhina fics but even the ones I enjoy reading usually don't make that much sense. I mean, what could Hinata offer him except maybe the closes thing to a woman with a sharingan? (And even there, the genetics are iffy.) But this Au!Hinata could offer him a challenge and something extremely different from the shrieking fan-girls that mostly surround him and-- yeah. I can see it working out, if I look at it sideways

[runespoor7]

On the subject of SasuHina: I love how she's like-- 'I only win 40% of my matches against Sasuke! I'm awful!' So funny and sweet and sad, that.
At the same time, that's because of their respective fighting ranges. Even here, Hinata mostly relies on taijutsu, and Sasuke, for all his massive katons, likes his fights up close and personal. Of course, in such a set-up, Jyuuken will >>>>>> normal taijutsu user. Against people like Shino, not so well.

Complacent!Neji is aw. Such a woobie.

Thanks for telling me you like this, I was kinda unsure about it , and, I dunno. I guess I felt I needed to post so I could work/post on the next ficlets. (I couldn't scrap it because of, well, the points you made, actually.)

[mariagoner]

On the subject of SasuHina:

Oh, that is DEFINITELY another reason I like Sasuhina fics (at least when they're decently written and don't make Hinata into a total push-over for manly Sasuke. Ugh!) I mean, I just think it's funny to see the shoe on the other foot for once, with Sasuke having to win someone's favor instead of having it slathered all over him, as in canon. And the irony of Hinata liking the 'Dead Last Loser' over him is too delicious to resist, no?

And I'm guessing that Sasuke occasionally pulls a Neji and cops a feel during a close-fight, right? Hate a see a strapping you man miss an opportunity like that. ::cough:: ;)

Dude, as long as you keep writing fun fics like this, I SHALL REVIEW HAPPILY. I'm not even really IN the Naruto fandom, though I updated with new fic a while back. But trying to find good fic in the Naruto fandom can be a bit crazy-making so as far as I'm concenred, I found a gold mine with you. ♥

[runespoor7]

...manly Sasuke? Wait, what? Are we reading the same manga, again? I mean, Sasuke kicks all kind of ass and is repressed as nobody's business, but I wouldn't describe him as manly. He's his mum minus the eyelashes. (or, to quote biztheinsane, "[he has] a pretty, pretty princess face".)

just think it's funny to see the shoe on the other foot for once, with Sasuke having to win someone's favor instead of having it slathered all over him, as in canon. And the irony of Hinata liking the 'Dead Last Loser' over him is too delicious to resist, no?

Yeah. Besides, it's nice to see him fumble with something a light and unconsequential as unrequited-crush angst/inadequacy for once, ratherb than the all-encompassing massive self-destructive Angst that is his life (<-no irony).

Nah, I don't think he does. Once he tried (it wasn't like it was conscious! It was just that she looked warm and she was right there and Sasuke's not a touchy-feely person but he wondered about resting his hand instead of landing a blow, and and, it's not any of your business.) and

[mattador]

Love it!

[runespoor7]

Thank you! ^^

[runespoor7]

I liked this part when I was writing it, but I can't help but feel it's flawed because of the lack of Neji. Technically, he's there for a good part of the ficlet, but it feels like he's even less there than when Hinata just thinks about his training. Which is part of the point but still feels slightly off to me. (But yay for canon-like! - good to know because unlike Whore!Hinata, this isn't one of the crack scenarios, so...)

Neji: DDDDDDDDDD: ... D: (combining jyuuken/gouken = mixing > supposed purity! this is brought to you by my country's elections for a president, starting in four days from now.)

Chibi Sasuke is made of cute, and any Sasuke who's dealing with an unrequited crush is even cuter. (Hinata is honoured, and intimidated, and happy that he's her friend, but completely and utterly clueless as to more.)

i love getting glimpses of stuff like that
So do I! ^^

[elict]

Yes. Awesome. Absolutely awesome, and so right. A self-taught technique with touches of other fighting styles which she probably knows as the back of her hand... I feel like it'd be superior, too.

And I love the parts about Hinata and Sasuke's freindship. Absolutely adorable ^^

[runespoor7]

:D Thank you.

A self-taught technique with touches of other fighting styles which she probably knows as the back of her hand... I feel like it'd be superior, too.
Well, at least she can rely on more than one fighting style, while Neji... is a prodigy Hyuuga taught in the way of the Jyuuken. :/ methinks that will not work so well out there in the real world.

They are adorable, aren't they? later they fall in love with Naruto.