[Naruto] Complicated

[runespoor7]

Title: Complicated
Author: runespoor7
Rating: PG-13
Summary: During and after the timeskip, Naruto, Sasuke, Sakura. In which Kabuto is succinct, Ino is devoted, and Jiraiya is bemused. Who's complicated?(implied OroSasu, OroKabu, Ino->Saku, NaruSakuSasu and combinations thereof.)
Notes: …more of the basic 'I have created a monster'. So much for a three-part

Comments

[outlawpoet]

Kabuto and Ino are right. Sakura, Naruto, and Sasuke are primarily defined by their inability to fit more than two ideas in their head at the same time. This is a good fic on that note.

I feel bad for Ino. In Sakura's chasing of Sasuke she's managed to become just as isolated and aloof, if in a way that's acceptable to her.

I like 'the Sannin voice'. You know that Jiraiya is a lot more than they show him in the anime, because it's all from Naruto's perspective, and he's kind of a retard.

[amelia_seyroon]

Poor Ino. D:

[runespoor7]

Sakura, Naruto, and Sasuke are primarily defined by their inability to fit more than two ideas in their head at the same time.
And when they manage that many, it's generally because they're conflicting ideas. (case in point: Sasuke 'I'm going to follow my own path which is leading me straight to Orochimaru's waiting arms'. Or maybe it's just Sasuke.)

I feel sort of bad for Ino too. She'll get better! I'm just torturing her because I love her, really.

'The Sannin voice' is what makes Jiraiya and Tsunade shinobi of their time, with rules to stay alive as long as possible and secret wars in which you see your friends die.

Oh, Jiraiya's definitely more, not only than what Naruto sees, but than Jiraiya himself lets on, most of the time. I like that about his character - he's not just ero-sennin, he can be rational and quite ruthless when needs be.

[crazy_toffee]

ALl in all, very nice. I especially liked Naruto's segment, because it was quite telling of Naruto's personality versus Jiraiya's preconcieved notions. I truly liked the way, through each realisation, Jiraiya began to see less and less of a paralell between himself, his prior students, and Naruto. It was refreshing, for a change.

Nitpick:
he's so involved in it that he's never noticed Jiraiya woke up,

It would be better to say "he's so involved in it that he hasn't noticed that Jiraiya woke up/is awake/has woken up".

[runespoor7]

Thank you! I'm really glad you like this, because I absolutely love your stories - though I absolutely fail at reviewing, my brain shrivels and dies when I try to leave you one for lack of intelligent things to say.

Jiraiya began to see less and less of a paralell between himself, his prior students, and Naruto. It was refreshing, for a change.
I live to break That Damn Circle.

Thanks for the correction - I'll change it right away! :)

[laleia]

Jiraiya's just jealous that Naruto is better at getting girls than he is. By the way, have I mentioned how much I love your writing, in general? Most lovely.

[runespoor7]

In Jiraiya's defence, he may be not that awful at getting girls either. He just... Did Not Expect that of Naruto. Especially so soon. It made him feel Old.

*blushes at compliment* Thank you!

[runespoor7]

sakura does indeed seem as though she was throwing away the now for the future...
Ooooh, I love that formula. Yes, that's exactly it.

I'm mostly interested in pointing the differences between the Sannin and their apprentices, because I think that the point of the manga is to show how history doesn't need to be repeated. (I make it sound woefully didactic, but still.)

And, honestly, I want to write about the neverending drama that is Team Seven, and that means straying far, far away from the bittersweet acceptance of their mentors (at least in Jiraiya and Tsunade's case; Orochimaru's a different beast all right, if only because he didn't resign himself to accepting things he didn't like. In that respect he's very like both Naruto and Sakura. :D!).

Oh, I rambled again. Oh well.

I'm glad you don't think I wrote them as 'caricatures of themselves' - occasionally I wasn't sure I wasn't pushing it a little, so that's a relief!

[elict]

I love the way your Ino cares for Sakura. I beleive that Sakura needs her there to drag her out of her obsession from time to time, to remember to live. Naruto can pretend easily enough, and he's probably better off like that, but Sakura's a thinker, and things are harder on her because of that.

...I could probably need an Ino in my life too, from time to time >__>''

And about the last one; I've always been fond of Jirayia POV's. He's the only one who's got the whole picture, you know? I have a very hard time getting into Jiraiya's head, myself... But you've managed well, with a writing style that I wouldn't have thought to be fitting for his character, but you pull it off very well.

Your writing style is lovely all toghether.

[runespoor7]

Agreed on why Sakura's better off with Ino, especially when she's the only Team Seven member stuck in Konoha (i.e. the past) when the two others are at least away. Sakura needs Ino to realise there's a village around her, not just ghosts and promises for the future.

The downside of Ino is that the way I write her, she tends to give off mixed signals and her caring and worrying for other people can take the appearance of a drama fit.

He's the only one who's got the whole picture, you know?
? ...I don't get what you mean.

I was a little worried about his characterisation from time to time because I have no earthly idea how they actually spent the timeskip. Naruto did most of the job here, so it may have helped.

[elict]

Ino is a lot more complex than the canon makes her out to be. I like fics that deals with those other sides of her, and explains why she acts the way she does.

Your Ino is complete love.

Jiraiya is the only one who has seen it all happen... From the young Yondaime all the way to young Naruto. He's the only one who can make comparisions. ...Sandaime probably had an eaven more completely picture, but since he's dead... ^^'';

[runespoor7]

My Ino springs mostly from a mixture or "I Love the Sound of You Walking Away" by horses_and_men and one of the Ino/Team Ten-centric lists at 20_truths which included the word 'Inokage' about the Hidden Village of Ino she fantasises about founding. I'm glad you like her. ^_^ (*too lazy to look for the links right now, sry.)

If it were up to me, there'd be an Ino official day and everything, but then, if it were up to me, there'd be an official day for a whole lot of characters. *neeeeeeeds to find herself that Ino icon, dammit*

Oh, I see.

Jiraiya is the only one who has seen it all happen... He's the only one who can make comparisions.

Yes, he saw it, but what did he make of it? He may be misinterpretating things. Also, he's missing the bunk of Team Seven history, which I think is much more important to Naruto's character than the previous generations.