Espresso 20

May 17, 2012 22:11


Author: Nonesane
Title: Prologue
Canon: The Changed - Portal Guards
Rating: PG
Challenges: Espresso 20 (the road to ____)
Word Count: 339
Summary: One who breaks the law must suffer its consequences.

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ninablues May 17 2012, 20:16:05 UTC
Ouch, that last line. I like the introspection and the glimpse into her thoughts we get-- the language and rhetoric too. Phrases like "like a teething cub" kind of make the world more immersive and real, you know? Looking forward to discovering more. :)

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nonesane June 5 2012, 12:38:40 UTC
The "teething cub"-comment and the last line are actually my favorite parts of this, so I'm very glad they caught someone's eye!

I made the mad decision of joining Camp NaNoWriMo all June, but after that there will be more and will definitely have a look around the rest of this community and do some commenting of my own :)

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lady_leia_solo May 17 2012, 23:14:53 UTC
That last line hooked me. Very interesting!

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nonesane June 5 2012, 12:39:51 UTC
The last line related heavily to what set the main plot of this story in motion, so I'm happy it has you curious! There will be more, but probably not before the end of June/beginning of July (real life is busy-busy at the moment).

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nonesane June 5 2012, 12:42:07 UTC
Karse will definitely be showing up more in Portal Guards, though she's actually not one of the POV-characters. But why she is where she is and why she was sent there will be revealed later on, never fear! Glad you liked the prologue :D

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rustydragonfly May 20 2012, 21:52:52 UTC
Now I'm really curious, not only as to what Karse did, but what her species might be. Nonhuman characters are so interesting!

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nonesane June 5 2012, 12:43:43 UTC
I'm big on non-human characters; it's just so much fun to play around with them, both when it comes to creating their biology and their sociology, so to speak. I won't give any spoilers, but I'll say that her species and the reason for her ending up where she is will come revealed later on in the story!

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