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[lady_macbeth_19]

Destroyed
Grape 23. Whiplash
Butterscotch (May, 1968)
Malt (Historic Event)
rating: PG-13 words: 469 (a really badly failed pocky) summary: Ruth, Grace's mother, recieves some bad news. Ruth, Hannah and David are all siblings, and Esther is their cousin.

notes: I know this is super-late, so if its disqualified for butterscotch week I can take that tag

Comments

[settecorvi]

He says it so fast it’s a blur of words to Ruth and it takes a second before they unravel in her head.

I really like this sentence, especially the "unravel in her head." It's really gets across the way the world seems to go strange and fall to pieces when a loss like this hits you, and it's all the more effective for not dwelling and over-describing.

[lady_macbeth_19]

Thank you so much! I'm often really worried that I go for overkill when it comes to emotion
also, welcome to Rats!
XxLil

[kay_brooke]

This is heartbreaking, especially the emotional punch when Hannah is trying to reconcile the fact that Esther is dead.

[lady_macbeth_19]

Thank you!
XxLil

[nathskywalker]

Wow I didn't expect something like this and like Ruth, am having trouble understanding why anyone would do that.

[lady_macbeth_19]

I know. The Kent State Shootings really upset me whenever I read about them: I mean these were just kids protesting against the rotten Vietnam War! I'm glad this piece had the punch I wanted it to have :)
Thank you!
XxLil