Comments | runaway_tales: Green Cheese #24, Chocolate Gelato #20 + pocky chain + cherry

kaitygirl88 in runaway_tales

Green Cheese #24, Chocolate Gelato #20 + pocky chain + cherry

Aug 22, 2011 16:11

Story: Blaze Mafia Family
Title: Moving On Up
Prompts: Green Cheese #24: satellite, Chocolate Gelato #20: bona fide (in good faith) + pocky chain + cherry (Jamie Gonzalez’ 1st person POV)
Rating: PG13
Words: 493
Summary: A pocky chain from Jamie’s point of view about his time in the Family. I use the green cheese prompt metaphorically, like Jamie ( Read more... )

[challenge] green cheese, [inactive-author] kaitygirl, [extra] pocky chain, [challenge] chocolate gelato, [topping] cherry

Comments 6

bookblather August 23 2011, 04:25:16 UTC

Ha, nice. I like Jamie. He just seems so determined and kind of weirdly sweet. Good job.

kaitygirl88 August 24 2011, 13:35:20 UTC

Yeah Jamie intends to go places, and the Blazes like his kind of ambition. Thanks for reading!

roisin_farrell August 23 2011, 18:33:30 UTC

Aww, Jamie there's no reason for Paul to shoot you. As Nicky Nails said, "You're a good boy."

kaitygirl88 August 24 2011, 13:36:25 UTC

He is a good boy! A paranoid boy, but still good! XD Thanks for reading.

lady_macbeth_19 August 24 2011, 14:47:33 UTC

You have a real knack with last lines: this one was really good again, and the whole piece really brought out his character, especially when Jamie supported Firebird in the discussions, showing his clear loyalty, and how that paid off in the end. I really like Jamie and I hope we see more of him :)
XxLil

kaitygirl88 August 25 2011, 14:49:54 UTC

Jamie started out as a "stock" Blaze soldier that I could pull out whenever I needed another body but he's kinda developed his own personality. He's loyal, intelligent, and just a little awkward. XD Thanks for reading!