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smoothiegarten in runaway_tales

Milk Chocolate 7, Rum Raisin 1

Aug 07, 2011 23:26

Author: Marina
Story: The Dragon World
Challenge: Milk Chocolate 7 ([in]tolerance), Rum Raisin 1 (mother - My Treat: what turned Geran wrong, if anything?)
Toppings/Extras: Gummy Bunnies (August card #1 from origfic_bingo: xeno/aliens/different cultures), Hot Fudge, Whipped Cream (Geran is sixteen, just shy of the age of maturity), Malt (Birthday prompt from ( Read more... )

[challenge] rum raisin, [extra] malt, [topping] gummy bunnies, [extra] fresh fruit : peaches, [topping] hot fudge, [author] marina, [topping] whipped cream, [challenge] milk chocolate

Comments 7

shayna611 August 8 2011, 13:36:51 UTC

I find Maire very interesting, and I'm kind of wondering who's playing who in this scene (sorry, Geran, you're pretty arrogant yourself) and what her plans are - if she's looking for something more in Geran than just the social/political benefits that come from being with him.

smoothiegarten August 9 2011, 07:09:26 UTC

Geran is totally arrogant. He either can't see it or won't admit it. As for Maire, she's become really interesting to me as well and I'd like to write more of her and get inside her head a little bit. Thank you!

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smoothiegarten August 9 2011, 07:10:20 UTC

Neither's meant to be really sympathetic. They ARE the bad guys. Maire's fun, though, and I'd like to write some more about her. Thank you! :D

bookblather August 9 2011, 01:27:46 UTC

Ooh, Maire seems intriguing. I also think that Geran isn't the only one being played in this scene... can't wait to see what comes of it.

smoothiegarten August 9 2011, 07:11:12 UTC

I really don't know which of them has the upper hand in this scene, and I'd like to write some more about the two of them and find out. I'm glad it's intriguing :D Thank you!

niee87 August 10 2011, 15:03:49 UTC

I agree with the others, it's hard to tell who, if anyone, has the upper hand here. It's also interesting seeing young Geran compared to what he's like when older. Their circularesque conversation was done really well here. Oh, Geran, you're really not that special! :P

ichthusfish August 19 2011, 02:30:12 UTC

Very interesting situation. I'm not so sure anyone has the upper hand here, though they both clearly think they do. Maybe it's magic itself that has the control in this scene. Either way, this has the sense of developing into something that isn't going to go the way either of them intend it. Nicely done :)