Running Jackal

[l_c_h_a_n]

Title: Running Jackal
Author: Muninn
Story: Chicago Snow
Flavors:

• Flavor of the Day (somatic)
• Cayenne #7 (combat training)
• Blueberry Cheesecake #2 (high hopes)

Toppings/Extras: Hot Fudge
Word Count: 899
Rating: PG
Summary: We meet the jackal.

Comments

[gandolforf]

Just a note to say I'm adding your hot fudge tag--don't forget to use all that apply :)

Also, it might be easier to read this if you put a blank line between paragraphs; that seems to be standard.

[l_c_h_a_n]

Shoot! I thought I'd added that one! I think I was on the fence about it, because I'm not sure how villain-y she is, really. Villain-y enough for right now, I suppose.

I'd noticed the line between paragraphs for other posts, but found those more difficult to read. I can definitely do that before I post, though.

[kaitygirl88]

Oh! I did not see this coming! Not that the Jackal worked for some shadowy company, or that she was warning Snow against herself! Nice twist, and I'm so interested to know what the heck Snow has gotten himself into.

[hungryocean]

Good job setting up and describing Ashka's tension right at the beginning. It puts the reader right into her mindset.