Comments | runaway_tales: Double Pocky

darkfaerieclaw in runaway_tales

Double Pocky

Jul 15, 2011 21:17

Title: Landscaping
Story Continuity: Battle For the Sun
Flavors: Gingerbread 9: ugly duckling, Papaya 23: you've outdone yourself, Mango 15: gathering evidence
Extra/Topping: Hot Fudge (Ragnar), Pocky
Word count: 100
Rating: PG
Summary: Ragnar tries therapy by way of arts 'n crafts.

( Funny thing, he had yet to bleed out a tube of paint that screamed half as well as a person. )

[topping] sprinkles, [challenge] gingerbread, [challenge] blackberry, [inactive-author] dark faerie claw, [challenge] papaya, [topping] hot fudge, [challenge] mango, [extra] pocky

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darkfaerieclaw July 16 2011, 07:52:12 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad you seemed to like both pockies.

It's scary how she seems to love Helene but fear her at the same time when they're supposed to trust each other.

Vera and Helene have a lot of baggage just generally. But it would be hard for them to trust one other, what with how many times they've backstabbed each other, intentional or not.

ichthusfish July 16 2011, 08:41:56 UTC

Oh wow! Both of these are powerful and awesome. You have a way with words. Nicely done :)

darkfaerieclaw July 16 2011, 16:52:19 UTC

Well, thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed them. <3

rustydragonfly July 16 2011, 10:45:24 UTC

These both have so much impact. The first one is almost sad in a way, creepy but still sad. The second... Vera's state of mine sounds really worrying. That's a really creepy metaphor for kissing, very vivid, but quite scary. Great job on both.

darkfaerieclaw July 16 2011, 16:56:13 UTC

These both have so much impact.

I take that as high praise. Thank you so much! I'm happy you seemed to enjoy both.

bookblather July 18 2011, 05:38:08 UTC

Ragnar, you are a scary, scary person. But not as scary as Helene, and Vera giving in to it. Just. Wow. DFC, you are a bloody fantastic writer.

darkfaerieclaw July 18 2011, 05:50:31 UTC

Thank you very much! That's wonderful to hear. I'm happy you seemed to like these. <3

smoothiegarten July 20 2011, 19:40:22 UTC

Ooh, I adore the description in both of these. The symbolism in the first is understated and fantastic, and the second...Helene, you creep me out forever the end. You're really good at the showing aspect of storytelling.

darkfaerieclaw July 20 2011, 20:13:27 UTC

Thank you! That's absolutely wonderful to hear. I'm glad you liked both. ^_^