Comments | runaway_tales: flavour of the day, blueberry cheesecake and strawberry shortcake with lots of fresh fruit

ninablues in runaway_tales

flavour of the day, blueberry cheesecake and strawberry shortcake with lots of fresh fruit

May 23, 2011 23:33

Story: Timeless { backstory | index }
Title: Potential
Rating: PG
Challenge: FOTD: longueur, Strawberry Shortcake #19: go the distance, Blueberry Cheesecake #30: go for broke
Toppings/Extras: fresh peaches, fresh strawberries, fresh blueberries, fresh pineapple, whipped cream
Wordcount: 1,389
Summary: Isaac Prowse nearly gives up. Edward Ashdown is ( Read more... )

[challenge] blueberry cheesecake, [extra] fresh fruit : peaches, [challenge] strawberry shortcake, [extra] fresh fruit : pineapple, [extra] fresh fruit : strawberries, [topping] whipped cream, [inactive-author] ninablues, [extra] fresh fruit : blueberries, [challenge] flavor of the day

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nathskywalker May 23 2011, 23:50:21 UTC

awww this is a strangely sweet moment between those two. Isaac needs to shake this inferiority complex of his and learning to read might help with that. As you said in the summary, Ashdown is nice in his very own way in this and the last line made me giggle.

ninablues May 24 2011, 07:31:32 UTC

Yeah, Ashdown is having a go at the whole 'nice' thing and Prowse does indeed have a bit of an attitude issue during this time... it was weird writing a piece in which Ashdown was probably the one being kindest, haha. Thanks!

ichthusfish May 24 2011, 00:50:46 UTC

This... is gorgeous! It's profound! I love the ineteraction here so much. The awkwardness each of them has at the begining seems to bring something out of the other, and that, in time, is the foundation stone which is going to make them both into the men that they are. Love it =D

ninablues May 24 2011, 07:32:30 UTC

Thank you! There are definitely shades of the men they'll grow to be in both of them here, and neither of them have a clue how much they both affect each other as they grow. :)

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ninablues May 24 2011, 07:36:23 UTC

Hahaha, yeah, same-- especially the parts during which Ashdown is actually teaching Isaac about things like manners and diction. XD Thanks so much! Ashdown was even worse with people as a teenager so it's always fun to write a rare moment in which he's being understanding.

bookblather May 24 2011, 04:46:08 UTC

Awww, Ashdown! I love it when he's standoffish and yet weirdly understanding at the same time, and awww, he is being SO good to Prowse here. Lovely job!

ninablues May 24 2011, 07:38:46 UTC

Teenage Ashdown's attempts at being understanding are always fun-- and unusually, in this case Ashdown's attitude is a lot better than Isaac's. Thanks!

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ninablues May 24 2011, 07:39:36 UTC

Haha, of course: Ashdown just keeps telling himself that Isaac is a useful asset and nothing more, and would probably be more useful with an education. Thanks!