pear 27. "for the rest of your life"

[hi_falootin]

pear 27. now & forever + butterscotch + sprinkles
story: second chances ; parent generation . wordcount: 3228. rating: pg.

"They haven't told us anything yet. This is a terrible hospital." Wherein there are too many people in this tiny room, no one really knows what diabetes is, and Jim can't tell if the worst part of his day is the life-changing

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[ninablues]

Jim's mother scares me. Poor, poor Jim. I can't imagine anything worse than being in hospital feeling crap and having a billion arguing people looming and snapping around me-- it's sort of inconsiderate-ness pushed to the point of being nightmarish. XD

Also, Carol is super believable as a character. Somehow she really stands out to me like that, especially her final bit of interaction with Jim.

[hi_falootin]

haha, yes-"inconsiderate" is a bit of an understatement! And thank you :) I'm glad you liked Carol. This is only the second time I've written her actually!

[hi_falootin]

ahahha, yeah, she's got issues. thanks for reading! :)

[shayna611]

I really liked the diagnosis scene - worth the work - you juggled the large number of angry people quite well, and the Dr - did you do some digging on diabetes then vs now? because it really felt appropriately dated.

Jim's mom is a real piece of work, but I found her totally believable. What's up with his dad not even coming?

Oh and Jim and Carol are sweet (almost sickeningly so) but that's ok, because you don't often do sweet relationships, so maybe it kind of balances things out a little? ;) And they were totally believable.

Very nice piece! :)

[hi_falootin]

yay, thank you! I did do a little bit of research into the then vs now thing but didn't turn up that much, so a lot of that was just stuff I remembered from a cousin's Dx story/guesswork, haha. And I'm really glad you think Jim's mom was believable, I'm never sure with character's like that. (LOL I don't know what's with his dad really-they have basically no relationship at this point, BUT STILL. I think Dad might have been denying that this was anything serious.)

And I'm with you on the sickeningly sweet thing-I think I'm just allowing them that because I fill their lives with so much misery and woe otherwise ;) anyway, thanks, glad you liked it!

[sarcasticsra]

This read really quickly, so when you mentioned it being long I actually had to go check the word count; it certainly didn't seem like over 3,000 words!

Man, I really wanted to shake Jim's mom in that first part. What the hell is wrong with you, woman? Shut up and let the doctor talk, jfc.

Poor Jim. You really got across that feeling of "omg overwhelmed", especially with the family feud there in the beginning. (Though, lol, it was a little trippy to read about people not knowing what diabetes is. Accurate for the time period, of course, but being that we're ~from the future~, it's funny. =P) He and Carol are super sweet, though!

Very nice!

[hi_falootin]

oh good! I'm glad to heat it was a quick read :) and I thinks Jim's mom could use some shaking too. I also found it kind of funny writing the part where no one really knows what diabetes-I don't think the type 1/type 2 designations even existed at this time, which is kind of weird to think about. anyway, thank you! :D

[bookblather]

Awww, Carol and Jim are so cute! Also, wow, his mother is, um, a bit of a piece of work. She seems more interested in getting her own way than in her son's welfare. And good Lord, that hospital room was definitely too small. Good on the doctor for kicking everyone out. Great job! I really enjoyed it.

[hi_falootin]

thank you! I'm really glad you liked it ♥ And I even felt a little claustrophobic writing that first hospital room scene, haha XD