REVUSIONSmagicdraftersDecember 14 2011, 03:40:23 UTC
REVISIONS The mods feel that though your app is strong, some adjustments need to be made. Please address the following points required for clarification: ● Please proof-read your application for grammar and spelling and use paragraph breaks. ● We would like to see a new Personality section written that focuses solely on Sweden than his relationship with Finland (though a section dedicated to his relationship to this important character is encouraged it should not be the entire focus). Please remember that the use of non-canonical sources like fanfiction can not be used to site information from when making your changes. ● We would like a clarification of how you think Sweden is shy when throughout his history he has repeatedly invaded other countries and is vocal in his attempts to proclaims Finland as his wife and keeps others away from the nation. ● We'd like to see new first and third person samples written that take place inside Hogwarts and that display Sweden's inner and outer voices.
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REVISIONS The mods feel that though your app is strong, some adjustments need to be made. Please address the following points required for clarification:
● Please proof-read your application for grammar and spelling and use paragraph breaks. ● We would like to see a new Personality section written that focuses solely on Sweden than his relationship with Finland (though a section dedicated to his relationship to this important character is encouraged it should not be the entire focus). Please remember that the use of non-canonical sources like fanfiction can not be used to site information from when making your changes. ● New first person sample to focus on Sweden including his mannerism, inner and outer voice. Revise third person sample to include his outer voice.
Please reply with your revisions as a comment to this comment within 72 hours so that the mods can see the changes made to your app. Thank you!
REVISIONS The mods feel that though your app is strong, some adjustments need to be made. Please address the following points required for clarification:
● Please proof-read your application for grammar and spelling and use paragraph breaks. ● We would like to see a new Personality section written that focuses solely on Sweden than his relationship with Finland (though a section dedicated to his relationship to this important character is encouraged it should not be the entire focus). Please remember that the use of non-canonical sources like fanfiction can not be used to site information from when making your changes. ● New first person sample to focus on Sweden including his mannerism, inner and outer voice. Revise third person sample to include his outer voice. ●
Please reply with your revisions as a comment to this comment within 72 hours so that the mods can see the changes made to your app. Thank you!
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The mods feel that though your app is strong, some adjustments need to be made. Please address the following points required for clarification:
● Please proof-read your application for grammar and spelling and use paragraph breaks.
● We would like to see a new Personality section written that focuses solely on Sweden than his relationship with Finland (though a section dedicated to his relationship to this important character is encouraged it should not be the entire focus). Please remember that the use of non-canonical sources like fanfiction can not be used to site information from when making your changes.
● We would like a clarification of how you think Sweden is shy when throughout his history he has repeatedly invaded other countries and is vocal in his attempts to proclaims Finland as his wife and keeps others away from the nation.
● We'd like to see new first and third person samples written that take place inside Hogwarts and that display Sweden's inner and outer voices.
Please reply with your revisions as a comment ( ... )
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The mods feel that though your app is strong, some adjustments need to be made. Please address the following points required for clarification:
● Please proof-read your application for grammar and spelling and use paragraph breaks.
● We would like to see a new Personality section written that focuses solely on Sweden than his relationship with Finland (though a section dedicated to his relationship to this important character is encouraged it should not be the entire focus). Please remember that the use of non-canonical sources like fanfiction can not be used to site information from when making your changes.
● New first person sample to focus on Sweden including his mannerism, inner and outer voice. Revise third person sample to include his outer voice.
Please reply with your revisions as a comment to this comment within 72 hours so that the mods can see the changes made to your app. Thank you!
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The mods feel that though your app is strong, some adjustments need to be made. Please address the following points required for clarification:
● Please proof-read your application for grammar and spelling and use paragraph breaks.
● We would like to see a new Personality section written that focuses solely on Sweden than his relationship with Finland (though a section dedicated to his relationship to this important character is encouraged it should not be the entire focus). Please remember that the use of non-canonical sources like fanfiction can not be used to site information from when making your changes.
● New first person sample to focus on Sweden including his mannerism, inner and outer voice. Revise third person sample to include his outer voice.
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Please reply with your revisions as a comment to this comment within 72 hours so that the mods can see the changes made to your app. Thank you!
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