Fic: How It Could Have Gone

[rubychan05]

Title: How It Could Have Gone
Author: RubyChan05
Prompt used: "The phrase: The train has already gone, would you like to hire a bicycle?"
Rating: PG
Spoilers: Doomsday, so not really any spoilers
Summary: How it could have gone in an alternate universe 
Notes: Very slight OOCness, as these aren't exactly the same people we all know and love

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Comments

[adafrog]

Very interesting idea. Would love more of Jack's thoughts/Doctor trying to make up for it.

[wickedplotbunny]

Ooh, lovely. It was pretty awful of me to give such a weird and obscure prompt...but you managed to pull it off, so, well done :)

[rubychan05]

Aww, thanks! And I liked that prompt - very original!

[rubychan05]

Thanks for commenting! Probably won't do more to this though...it really didn't turn out as I'd hoped...

[rivana]

Ooh, would love more of this. Way too short.

[rubychan05]

Probably won't do more to it..it was just me playing around with an idea or two really.

[donutsweeper]

I liked this... thought it could have used a bit flushing out, but it was definately an interesting idea.

[rubychan05]

Yeah, I was running out of time in regard to the ending of the fest, and I rushed it a bit. Plus, halfway through it ended up in a completely different direction to where I thought it would go. ^_^

[unfeathered]

Very interesting idea, and an ingenius response to the prompt :-)

This is a very tiny, probably unnecessary comment, but I have to admit that I got a bit confused by your mention of a 'parallel world' in the summary, because I thought you meant it was set in Rose's universe - but then you mentioned that and I realised what you actually meant was just 'how it could have gone'. Personally, I think I'd take out the 'parallel world' mention. But that could be just me! *grin*

I did like the idea of the Doctor thinking he was rescuing Jack and Jack seeing he just wanted a replacement. And Jack realising he just needed more time to come to terms with what had happened, and would want to see the Doctor again some day.

[rubychan05]

Thanks for the gorgeously long comment!

I was worried about the parallel world mention, but I couldn't think of how else to describe it..it is a parallel universe in my mind. Not Rose's, but another one somewhere.

[unfeathered]

Thanks for the gorgeously long comment!

I do tend to run on a bit... :-)

Re. the parallel world bit, but possibly it would be less confusing if you called it AU instead of a parallel world. It's taken my brain this long to realise that's what it would normally be called! :-)

[rubychan05]

I changed it to 'alternate universe' instead of 'parallel world'. ^_^

And I don't know if you noticed that I'm separating my dialogue now, but that's down to you too...I'll probably go back and edit Drums one day!

[trobadora]

That's really spot on, for both of them. The Doctor's delusions and Jack's self-awareness - perfect. :-)

[rubychan05]

Aww, thanks!