Prompt #10: Beginnings

[gilpin25]

Title: Beginnings
Author: gilpin25
Format & Word Count: One-shot, 3252 words
Rating: PG
Prompts: #10; Awake
Warning: None, apart from the author being back at the start of OotP.
Summary: She wore a black glittery top over faded jeans and he looked into the young, upturned face which was wide at the brow, pointed at the chin, and the colour of warm ivory.

Comments

[mrstater]

Oh, this is simply wonderful! What a delightful change of pace from DH, to go back and remember why I'm here in the first place: because when I read that Remus and Tonks were a couple, I, too, was kept very much awake

[gilpin25]

Thank you so, so much. For making me grin like an idiot when I read this.:D

I'm chuffed to bits you enjoyed it, though I'm sure it wasn't anywhere near as much as I enjoyed reading this because you seem to have mentioned everything I hoped would come across to someone reading it. Like you've said, I like to imagine there was something, some chemistry, or spark of recognition of like meeting like from the outset (however unlikely Remus may tell himself it is), that explains what started their relationship off, and leads into the first time we see them together in OotP.

And I imagine that Remus, recognizing their sameness, is going to lie awake for quite some time tonight...You must be a Legilimens (or Legiliwomans;)); my starting point for this was to have a conversation between them where you'd hopefully feel that afterwards that Remus won't be dropping off at all when he hits the previously longed-for pillow, but will be thinking and wondering about her for a little while, and at odd moments in the days to come, and she'll be

[sspring92]

Love snappy banter! Why i always loved shows like the Gilmore girls and the west wing, rapid fire, witty banter that alas i am incapable of in real life! Very enjoyable, Thanks!

[gilpin25]

Thank you very much! I like to imagine that they'd have hit it off/made an impression on each other from the start, and that their dialogue would be similar to the "Don't call me Nymphadora, Remus" exchange - half flirty, half polite, half ... full of possibilities for fanfic authors to write about, lol.

Thanks again. :) I'm very glad you enjoyed it.

[under_crisis]

that was... wow. it's such a feel-good story, and i love how it goes from awkwardness to anger to playfulness (but through it all i just felt the wonder). this is also one of my favorite missing moments, and you wrote it beautifully. thanks for the lovely story, it really perked me up for my blah workday :D

[gilpin25]

Thank you very much for such nice comments - I'm really glad you enjoyed it. I know it's an oft-done moment in fanfic, but it was such fun to write. I like to imagine there was a connection straight off to echo what we see in the "Don't call me Nymphadora, Remus" exchange in OotP.

Thanks again. :)

[drumher]

I have been looking forward to reading this all day and what a treat it turned out to be. You've absolutely succeeded in giving us a fresh look at a Remus and Tonks moment that has been written about almost as often as the Hospital scene. By the end it is easy to see how this first meeting would progress naturally to the light flirtation we get in the Advance Guard scene.

This rhythm of their dialogue felt so real that mrstater was right in thinking you must have been in the room taking notes or skulking about nearby with an extendable ear!

Lovely job!

[gilpin25]

I'm so glad you enjoyed it.:D

I know it's an oft-done and imagined scene, but I wanted to try and do one that felt as if it could come before the "Don't call me Nymphadora, Remus" moment we see in OotP. I like to think there'd have been a spark/connection right from the start, that Remus will be lying awake for a little while after this thinking about her, and vice versa, and I'm really pleased you liked the dialogue and that it felt like eavesdropping on them. As that's just lovely to hear!

Thank you very much for such great comments.

[otahyoni]

Very sweet and very them. I feel warm and fuzzy now. :)

[gilpin25]

Thanks very much.:D I've been giving them a lot of angst in the fic I'm working on so it was nice to go right back to the beginning, and try and do the warm and fuzzies instead! And also make myself permanently hungry by writing about so much food... ;)

Thanks again!