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Mar 18, 2008 22:49

Title: Cold
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carnivalgirl, prompt 18

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philotic_net March 19 2008, 03:13:25 UTC
"Yes." Remus replied. “I’m freezing.”

What a great last line. Remus understands his situation perfectly but thinks there is nothing to be done for it. I loved your descriptions of Remus' gauntness. Bill's comment was particuarly moving. I really appreciated the details pertaining to the way people viewed his new state, "with looks of surprise and horror". It really makes clear how drastic the change is.

This was a great little short. I enjoyed it very much. thanks.

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carnivalgirl March 19 2008, 12:55:15 UTC
Oh, I'm so happy you liked the last line! I wanted the shot to finish nicely. Thank you.
I figure the Weasleys are a well-fed sort of family, so they'd notice something like skinniness...I'm glad you did! Thank you very much for your review.

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