Centre of Attention (prompt 6)

[shimotsuki]

Title: Centre of Attention
Author: shimotsuki
Format & Word Count: Ficlet, 932 words
Rating: PG
Prompt: 6, whimsy
Warning: Shameless fluff and AU-watch out!
Summary: Teddy has plans for Remus on his birthday. They involve fireworks and dreadful nautical puns. And a trombone.
Author's Note: This ficlet is a slightly early birthday present for Remus. Set

Comments

[merryb87]

That was very sweet and I enjoyed it a lot, it was nice to see an AU, and someone that did a Birthday Remus fic. On a side note, I'm assuming "Mum" in this fic is Andromeda? Just out of curiosity why is she being referred to as Mum?

Lol your restaurant reminded me of the Rainforest Cafe at the MGM Grand.

[shimotsuki]

Thanks for your comments! I'm happy you liked this.

Just out of curiosity why is she being referred to as Mum?

I'm writing this from Tonks's point of view (POV), so I wanted to refer to each character in the way that Tonks would think of them. If I were doing a Remus POV fic, Andromeda would be "Andromeda," and if it were from Teddy's POV, she'd be "Gran."

Rainforest Cafe at the MGM Grand -- Hee! I didn't have any specific place in mind, but I think we all know places like that...

[pinkhairedauror]

This is BRILLIANT!! LOL!!!

Random comments: Andi's love for Remus? WIN.

Tonks' ACTUAL favourite sport: Making Remus blush.

WOOOO! Go kiddie!Teddy and ideas! (of course. He's the son of Remus and Dora Lupin. Yeah, he IS smart!)

But his eyes were rather bright, and Tonks found herself thinking of a gaunt and desperate man, long ago, who had been so sure that a child of his would only ever be ashamed of its father.

*sniffles* BEAU-TI-FUL!!!

Well done, and thank you for sharing!

[shimotsuki]

Aww, thanks -- I'm glad you liked it! (It was supposed to be fluff, but I couldn't resist a little sniffle moment.)

Andi's love for Remus? WIN. Hee! I like Andromeda, and someday I want to write about her getting to know Remus better and deciding that her daughter may have had a point with this guy after all. I'd hope that by ten years after the war, they'd be getting along.

[wildmagelet]

Absolutely lovely! You captured their characters perfectly, the way they would be in the happiest of circumstances when the best sides of their personalities are allowed to shine, and did it in less than a thousand words!

This is the sort of universe that my idea of Remus and Tonks is going to stay in, no matter what ideas JKR had to the contrary. :)

This just made me feel happy, and you can't ask for more from fanfic, really, so thank you!

[shimotsuki]

Aww, thanks for the comments -- it's always good to hear you made someone happy!

I'm especially glad you think the characterizations work here, because this kind of angst-free, danger-free situation isn't something we really get to see the characters dealing with in canon.

[carnivalgirl]

AU is the best genre of them all. I loved this, it was so funny and adorable. I laughed out loud at 'Cap'n Horatio's', a little boy's ideal to be sure. Teddy was such a lovely kid and I liked the way you referred back to the past briefly, as someone said earlier. The cake and exploding things was great too, I agree that Remus deserves it! And the fact that Andromeda was there too was a good addition. Oh, and Ted's last lines are such a kid thing to say.
OK, this is long enough. Excellent story!

[shimotsuki]

Thank you! It's great to hear that you liked this, and I'm chuffed that you picked up on the "Cap'n Horatio's."

[phoenixfyre13]

Oh, this was completely wonderful! I thought you did a fabulous job of capturing all of them, especially Teddy's nine year old enthusiasm -- of course he would think this place was the perfect dinner spot! What kid wouldn't love to be served by pirates? It reminds me of the time I really wanted my parents to celebrate their anniversary at Chuck E Cheese's...fortunately they knew that probably wasn't the best idea. ;)

This one made my heart ache a little, because it's such a plausible moment that might have been. My favorite line: But his eyes were rather bright, and Tonks found herself thinking of a gaunt and desperate man, long ago, who had been so sure that a child of his would only ever be ashamed of its father. Because I think it does such a succinct and beautiful job of reminding us where Remus had come from. Great job! :D

[shimotsuki]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked Teddy and the pirates -- I had fun playing with the idea of a nine-year-old trying to plan a special night out, heh. Also, thanks for the comment on that flashback line; I'm glad to hear you thought that worked.