Mantra

[iamweebles]

Title: Mantra
Author: nfwbls
Format & Word Count: Fic, 1361 words.
Rating: PG
Prompt: prompt 1 (ee cummings), prompt 2 (uh, doll?)
Warning: There's a bit of talk about sex, but sadly not smutty
Summary: Tonks tries very hard but unsuccessfuly not to cry, though this isn't as angsty as you'd expect
Author's Note: I swear prompt 2 looks like a cabbage

Comments

Ded xx

[fthpfthpfthp]

Every single moment of this is exquisite! From her struggle with her identity in early childhood to her laughter at her wedding.

This is the Tonks I know and love. Remus, too, is absolutely authentic. Your writing makes these two so real I feel like I should think of something to say in case I ever run into them on the street: "Hello. So nice to finally meet you in person. Nfwbls has written your stories so vividly I feel like I know you... Would you like to come over for tea and home-made chocolates?"

Augh! How do you do it!? *wipes away tears*

Re: Ded xx

[iamweebles]

Oh my goodness, thank you! That is one of the nicest things anyone has ever said to me. Will you give me a call and invite me too if you ever have them over? :D

[huffle_the_puff]

Wow! I loved this, a nice little summary of Tonks's life. The 'don't cry' bits were really awesome, in general just a very cleverly written fic. Poor Tonks!

*almost sheds a tear of her own*

[iamweebles]

Thank you very much! The poor Tonks part made me smile - this is actually a much more cheerful piece than I usually write ;)

[huffle_the_puff]

Haha, I barely ever write fluff. Angst is so much easier to write in my opinion, anything I try to write without angst ends up like something you'd use to line your bin.

[shimotsuki]

Aw, this is terrific. (Awfully cheery for you, though, isn't it? ;P) The "mantras" work wonderfully to demarcate stages of Tonks's life, and I love the way you pull the rug out from under our feet with the last one. (Also, how sweet is it for Remus to get emotional at the wedding, when he manages not to do that almost all the time?!)

I'm trying to think through the structure; I'm impressed by how much you've got going on in a short piece. I guess scene 1 sets up the fact that Tonks has strong emotions, as well as showing an early father-daughter scene that echoes the wedding. (Something I noticed is that there's a theme set up about Tonks wanting to be normal, too, but that seems to be specific to this scene --? I can't find the thread to pick up again later. But that might just be me.) Scene 2 is a great contrast with how she feels when she does fall in love, later on (and again, the tie-in with Charlie looking unflatteringly happy (*snort*) at the wedding is a lovely touch). Scene 3 works both to contrast her feelings for

[iamweebles]

Something I noticed is that there's a theme set up about Tonks wanting to be normal, too, but that seems to be specific to this scene --? I can't find the thread to pick up again later. But that might just be me.

You caught me damn the sharp-eyed reader :P

[iamweebles]

Oh, and I forgot...

(Awfully cheery for you, though, isn't it? ;P)

I know! And for a prompt that specifically mentions death... I'm losing my touch :P

[pinkhairedauror]

Ohhh this is beautiful!! I both cried and laughed!! It's so hard for her to resist things when they come, and you've captured that sooo right! Much love!

[iamweebles]

Thank you so much! I'm so glad it evoked both kinds of emotions :)

[alasse_fae]

oooo lovely! Thanks for sharing the rest :) Love Remus being the one to cry at the wedding, and then all the laughter.

*happy sigh*

[iamweebles]

Thanks! Hee, do you think I'll be able to suggest an rt_challenge prompt for the meeting on the 15th?

[alasse_fae]

Absolutely! Hope I won't get to many patients and will make it for that ;))