Title: In the Aftermath
Author:
gilpin25Format & Word Count: Fic, 7395 words
Rating: Pg-13
Prompt: prompt 18 - first person; 20 - genre: romance (plus a load of angst); 28 - “I’ll be your mirror…” The Velvet Underground.
Warning: Language. Mild, but the narrator's stressed. ;)
Summary: “There are some things, some looks, so private you shouldn’t ever see
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Your Ron is pitch perfect. The whole Lupin/Tonks scene at the end is simply gorgeous (and if I end up writing a drabble-y thing about them sitting stargazing and eating toast, please don't kill me, I just love that image!) Love how you work in the Ron/Hermione angle, and loved him thinking how well placed the Hufflepuffs were for a midnight snack! Nice bit with the Gryffindor common room being high up because of their lofty ideals, while the Hufflepuff one was more down to earth...
*goes to flail, rec, and read again*
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I did enjoy writing Ron before - he's such a great blend of obliviousness, and his own special kind of astuteness and humour, as well as the food fixation! - and he was even better this time around. I was worried no one would want to read yet another hospital fic in the world but I thought he'd have a far more personal angle on it than Harry after Bill was attacked, which would also enable him to see R/T with different eyes. When I read the scene again, it's clear how scared he is for Bill and how angry at Dumbledore, so that all seemed very similar to someone else there too.
I only got the idea for the Gryffindor and Hufflepuff common rooms at the very last minute, so I'm really pleased you like that.
(and if I end up writing a drabble-y thing about them sitting stargazing and eating toast, please don't kill me, I just love that image!)I'd look forward to reading it! I seem to have a thing about them ( ... )
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Ron's a wonderful narrator; I enjoyed writing him before but I think he was even more fun this time around, even though I was worried no one would want to read another hospital fic in the world. ;) But he's wonderfully oblivious so you can see how he'd be so near to guessing about R/T but not quite make that final leap. Yet I also think he's quite astute in his own way, and caring so much about what happened to Bill would make him see the revelations in the hospital in a different, and more personal way, to Harry.
And I'm glad you liked the R/T because I didn't really want to wrap it all up quickly and neatly at the end - on the other hand, Ron couldn't stand there listening for two hours, thinking about his much-longed for bacon sandwich, lol. So I was just hoping it didn't read too quick and easy after all that.
Thank you for such a lovely review and comments. :)
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I'd love to comment more, but you seem to have made me speechless. :)
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I do enjoy writing Ron but he does worry me as I haven't got much experience of being a sixteen year old boy! (Or any handy brothers to ask). So it's great you think I got him right - he's such a fascinating blend of obliviousness, and his own kind of astuteness and humour in the books, and it seemed he'd have a whole different take on the scene to Harry with Bill being hurt. And, of course, his liking for food at all times was incredibly useful at the end, when I was desperately trying to think how he could possibly know how R/T were finally sorting themselves out. ;)
Thanks again. It's great to know you enjoyed it so much. :)
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There is so much greatness in this story that I hardly where to begin. First of all, I love how you write Ron as the narrator. There's the mix of humor (or simply amusing teenage boy-ness), insecurity and awkward sweetness that makes Ron such a good character - and you totally nailed his voice. I especially laughed at "Krum and his doubtless very muscular and powerful thighs". Then, of course, the Remus/Tonks parts are so well written. I like that their feelings are silent, but noticeable to the point that Ron takes notice. And finally, the last scene is just <3. So poignant and heartbreaking.. but happy.
This is really a fantastic fic, on so many levels.
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I do like writing Ron - even though I have the occasional complete panic about knowing nothing about being a sixteen year old boy - because he's just so great to tell a story with. Especially one like this where we all know what the big surprise is going to be but he doesn't. He's such a wonderful blend of obliviousness and honesty, and so it was fun to let him get very, very near to the truth and then still not see it coming at all. I also thought he would have a completely different viewpoint to Harry, being so upset and angry over Bill, and that was the perfect tie into, firstly, Remus and then R/T.
I do think he'd sneak a look at Molly's books in an effort to learn something, lol. And probably worry a lot about Krum's muscular thighs ( ... )
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I do love writing Ron, despite the occasional complete panic that I know very little about being a sixteen year old boy, lol. But he's such a great mixture of things and doing it from the Bill angle seemed to tie in with R/T so well, and why that might be important to him. Plus I was incredibly grateful for his liking for food at all times when I was wracking my brains for some feasible way he could possibly know how R/T sorted it all out at the end. ;)
Thank you.:D
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I don't know - after Molly in the other one, I'm a bit worried I've now created a Peeping Eating Ron. ;)
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