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Baby Steps Toward Regret

Aug 10, 2007 22:15

Title: Baby Steps Toward Regret
Author: scarlett71177
Format & Word Count: Ficlet; 1172
Rating: PG
Prompt: 9- cheat, 11- photo of woman peeking out of the covers
Warning: Angst?
Summary: Tonks awaits the results of her pregnancy test
Author’s Note: Takes place in July? Of Deathly Hallows.

( The longest wait of her life )

august ficathon, prompt 9, scarlett71177, prompt 11

Comments 32

morrighangw August 11 2007, 02:38:39 UTC

I can definitely see the lead-up to Remus' "incident" at Grimmauld Place...

Wonderful characterization. =D

scarlett71177 August 11 2007, 02:45:16 UTC

Thank you so much. It was really tough characterizing Remus in this piece (especially since it was from Tonks' pov). Getting a fair balence between standoffish!Remus we see after their marriage and Angry/Regretting!Remus we see at #12.

Glad you liked the characterization.

eternalylost August 11 2007, 02:44:42 UTC

I really liked Remus' reaction, at the end. I think the facial expression was spot on.

Oh, and I definitely agree that Remus would have been an AMAZING dad :(

scarlett71177 August 11 2007, 02:48:29 UTC

Thank you so much, I'm glad you found his reaction spot on.

*sigh* I couldn't resist putting that line in about what kind of father he would be.

Thank you.

Amy

jadeddiva August 11 2007, 02:59:38 UTC

Oh, this is fantastic. So perfect :)

scarlett71177 August 11 2007, 03:04:41 UTC

Thank you so much! :-D

Amy

princesstopaz August 11 2007, 03:21:15 UTC

Oh that's so cruel, that part where she imagines him with the baby, given canon, *gleefully tosses book to the flames* but this is great! And yeah, you can definitely see the lead up to incident at Grimmauld Place. You can also see though, the foreshadowing of an ugly row. What pregnant woman wants to see that expression on their husband's face?

scarlett71177 August 12 2007, 05:37:30 UTC

I couldn't resist including that bit about her daydreaming on what kind of father he could be. I'm glad you think it leads up to the incident at #12, I kept flipping through the book and trying to gauge his reaction to things.

Thanks for your review; it is appreciated.

Amy

wildmagelet August 11 2007, 04:10:03 UTC

Oh, it's so painful to read. It's beautifully written, but the R/T ship is just so angsty at this stage in the timeline, isn't it?

The “You’re pregnant.” just sums it up so well. Remus has already distanced himself from the situation. Really powerful last line.

Even though I'm much accepting of Remus's continuing characterisation in DH now, I still hate that he had to be like that. Tonks missed out on having an initial moment of shared joy, at least, before the apprehension set in. Since JKR knew that she was going to kill them off, what really bothers me is that she couldn't let them just be happy for the whole book. We had the R/T angst in HBP, thank you very much. It would have been nice to see Remus, the happy husband, as well as Remus the happy new father.

Um. Sorry. That went off on a bit of a tangent. I'm clearly not even close to being over this yet! :)

Lovely job with the fic and with a difficult plot.

scarlett71177 August 12 2007, 05:45:12 UTC

Thank you. Though I love the genre it is a bit tough to write R/T angsty at this stage... knowing there's no happy future, but a happy afterlife instead.

I do think Remus must have distanced himself quickly- maybe not to the utmost degree until it had sunken in.

I agree, it's so sad to see Remus being such a git. That's not our Remus. I know what you mean- seeing them happy wouldn't have justified their deaths but it may have made us feel a little more at peace with the characters. It would have been wonderful to see them happy- the brief glimpse we see when Teddy is born is just beautiful.

I'm not over it yet either, lol.

THanks for the review!!!!

♥