Good job, Tonks :D I love how you show her just being so nonchalant about it. Most fics usually have her being very adament about just how much she doesn't care. :)
I really liked the ending - it's such a nice change for Tonks to just treat Remus' lycanthropy like part of who he is and not treat him any differently. I'm not surprised he feels fantastic.
I thought you did a really good job with the first person, too - so often I find first person a clunky read, but here it really wasn't.
That was fantastic. I know I've done the whole Tonks-confronting-Remus but I like this so much better. The exchange between the two of them was just spot on, and the integration of the song lyrics worked out really nicely. Didn't feel clunky at all. I tip my hat to you!
We've all done the Confrontation, so I wanted to do something different. I though Remus would appricaiate that she treated just like usual the morning after.
Hey babe, finally checking in very quickly - this was lovely! Really liked the matter of fact tone in the way you've written her and the voice of the whole piece.
One teeny bit of concrit: Human ears can’t pick up the sound of a gentle rain falling on the roof that I know is there. They won’t be sensitive enough for another three weeks. I thought the "they" was a little bit of an unclear pronoun reference that tripped me up a bit, and the "there" structurally could refer to the roof as easily as the rain. Maybe wordsmith it just a bit? Something like "My ears can't hear the gentle rain falling on the roof, they won't be sensitive enough for another three weeks. But I know the rain is there."
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I love how you show her just being so nonchalant about it.
Most fics usually have her being very adament about just how much she doesn't care.
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I know. Most have her all confronting him, I've done it, but now, post-DH, I want to try it again ;)
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I love how Remus automatically assumes that he's the one cooking... XD
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Yep, *LOL*, Just a teeny angsy ;)
Oh yeah, Remus SO cooked. Insperation: My Hubbs and I had just about this same converstaion right before I wrote this.
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I thought you did a really good job with the first person, too - so often I find first person a clunky read, but here it really wasn't.
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I guess I'm going back to revisit OotP and HBP now that we know what happens to R&T. It's quite fun =)
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We've all done the Confrontation, so I wanted to do something different. I though Remus would appricaiate that she treated just like usual the morning after.
Glad you enjoyed =)
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One teeny bit of concrit: Human ears can’t pick up the sound of a gentle rain falling on the roof that I know is there. They won’t be sensitive enough for another three weeks. I thought the "they" was a little bit of an unclear pronoun reference that tripped me up a bit, and the "there" structurally could refer to the roof as easily as the rain. Maybe wordsmith it just a bit? Something like "My ears can't hear the gentle rain falling on the roof, they won't be sensitive enough for another three weeks. But I know the rain is there."
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Ah, yes, that damned line. Gave me SO much trouble. *sigh* Oh well...
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