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[faeriemaiden]

   And oh it is so dark.

He is sleeping in an alleyway - or trying to sleep; he is so exhausted that he cannot seem to shut his eyes - and all of his bones ache and oh it is so dark and so grey and so cold and perhaps he is becoming a cold dark grey thing of no consequence that someone is going to stumble over and forget and perhaps when that

Comments

[uponplains]

Oh wow. That was so lovely, and so different. I loved the run-ons and the distinct way you captured his frame of mind. Really wonderful job.

[jadeddiva]

You are fast becoming my favorite new writer, with your fantastic grasp of imagery and words. This is another fantastic example and I thoroughly enjoyed it.

[morrighangw]

Wow.

[eternalylost]

oh wow, you captured that amazingly.
I loved how you really showed what a daze he was in

[freakinwinky]

Beautiful. I very much enjoyed the style and the way you used the run ons. Great job!