Prompt 4: if only it were so easy (to bend and to break)

[jadeddiva]

Title: if only it were so easy (to bend and to break)
Author: jadeddiva
Format & Word Count: Fic, 1768
Rating: PG-13
Prompt: #4, multiple narrators
Warnings: Deathly Hallows spoilers
Summary: A reunion, in three parts. During DH, post Chapter 11.
Author's Notes: This started as something else entirely and ended as this. Deathly Hallows spoilers, as

Comments

[morrighangw]

Andromeda would understand. Love the different perspectives.

<>But if you leave again you’re not allowed back in.

And we hope that he learned the first time around...

[jadeddiva]

Yeah, I hope he's learned his lesson too.

Thanks for reading :)

[womblette]

That was a really nice take on their reunion - I like that Andromeda wasn't a mad raging Black, and that Tonks didn't flip, which I just can't imagine her doing. You did the narrations really well, too, they seamed together nicely.

One catch - you've got a plural on and once he proves that to both her and her daughters

[jadeddiva]

Oh - thanks for catching that.

I was trying to do something differnt, less internal monologue and more dialogue and I'm glad it seemed to work. And less imagery, too. Hooray.

I don't think Tonks would freak out. I think she'd hit him but I think she'd be much calmer than most of fandom believes.

[womblette]

Interestingly, I always think that well written dialogue has suited these two characters better. Imagery is lovely, and when well done, really good to read. But Tonks is such a character of essence, that overly flowery language often doesn't seem to fit with what we know of her.

Yeah, I think she'd quite possibly hit him - hormones for a start! But I've a feeling she'd understand, too.

[sparkly_stuff]

“It is I, Remus John Lupin, werewolf and negligent husband of one Nymphadora Tonks who prefers to be known by her maiden surname only.”

He can hear the whirl of the magical locks as the door opens, and she is there, staring at him with expressionless eyes. She looks so much older than her twenty-five years, and he feels guilty because he knows so much of this is his fault.

“It’s better than taking the name of a negligent husband,” she says tiredly.

OH SNAP! lol

Nice use of the prompt, I say! V. angsty, even the "happy" ending is angstalicious. Good fics like these make me glad JKR left us so many missing scenes to play with. <3

And why don't I have more R/T icons? D:

[jadeddiva]

Thank you!

[phe_o]

Awesome--I love Remus's opening dialog, but especially Andromeda's comparison of them to her own situation. Excellent.