In Your Room

[lady_bracknell]

Title: In Your Room
Author: ladybracknell
Format & Word Count: Ficlet, 667
Rating: R
Prompt: Prompt 26 - Scandal, and 30 - Enjoy The Silence.
Warning: There be sex. And shamefully literal use of prompts.
Summary: He can’t say he anticipated this reaction to him being outed as a werewolf and splashed all over the front of the newspaper, but he can’t say he doesn

Comments

[devonwood]

She slips out of her clothes and tosses them into a rough pile on the carpet before sliding in next to him and pulling the sheet up to her chin, which reassures him a bit because people don’t normally break hearts naked.

When do they break hearts naked? Actually, scratch that-- I don't really want to know. ;) :D

Lovely, and literal, take on the prompts. It's so like Remus to overanalyze things, and have Tonks come in and just make it seem like all of that worrying was for nothing.

Just one bit of concrit, the line "He’s glad, but he hadn’t expected her to come, and wonders why she’s here, if she wants to talk, which he doesn’t think he’ll be able to bear because he’s not sure what he’ll say. is a bit long. Maybe you could split it somehwere, so its easier to read. :)

Lovely work.

[lady_bracknell]

Thanks!

I always figure Remus for an over-analyser, and Tonks as the kind of person who really isn't - which makes them an interesting pairing, in a lot of ways. I can't help thinking it might be what causes them all the trouble in HBP.

is a bit long. Maybe you could split it somehwere, so its easier to read.

I do like a long, run-on sentence (and I have written much, much longer ones than that ;)) - there I was using ordinate clauses in a cascade to try and give you a short-cut into his state of mind - it's supposed to feel a bit clunky.

[mrstater]

Oh, this is an interesting read! My Tonks got royally pissed off by that article in the Prophet, but I really like this take you did on her, at least if she is pissed off, not showing that side to Remus, and really doing more what he needs to see, and that's that she knows this is how it is and accepts him anyway. And makes him laugh, which he needs.

And all done in bed? Very nice.

I've really enjoyed reading your work in the short form. But I'll be happy to see you back to your longer stuff, too. :)

[lady_bracknell]

Thanks! I'm really loving these short pieces, actually - and I never thought I'd say that.

I wanted to have a go at writing them actually in a relationship, further down the line, encountering a problem, since I haven't really explored that a lot before, and I'm glad you liked it. I always liked your Tonks' indignation on Remus' behalf - but I think it's equally likely that she's so convinced that it doesn't matter that he's a werewolf that it doesn't really register for her - she's seen the way he treats it light-heartedly a lot of the time, and that's given her the permission not to treat it like the deadly serious issue she knows it is all the time (if that makes sense...). Which I think he'd like, knowing that she knows its serious, but the don't have to treat it in a serious way.

Anyway, enough cold-induced rambling. Thank you very much :).

[joely_jo]

I think you are one of the most intriguing and talented new authors I've had the pleasure to read. Really, really enjoyed this. It's got that wonderful 'see it in your head perfectly' quality to it that I think is missing from many fics. Just beautiful.

Do you mind if I add you to my flist? :)

[lady_bracknell]

Thank you very much. I'm really pleased you liked this and thought it had a visual quality to it, because that's something I'm constantly working to improve.

I would be delighted to be added to your f-list :).

[kileaiya]

I love how Remus overanalyzes things and how the article really doesn’t even faze Tonks. And her jokingly referring to herself as his groupie was great.

Lovely job. :)

[lady_bracknell]

Thank you very much. I can just see them having this kind of conversation, where Remus has spent all day thinking and fretting about the worst, and Tonks just breezes in, completely unconcerned....

Glad you liked it.

[pink_n_violent]

that was very sweet. i enjoyed it.

[lady_bracknell]

Thank you very much. I'm pleased you liked it.