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[joely_jo]

Title - Impasse
Author - Joely
Prompt - #19, the photograph of the scar, #13, first person, present tense
Format and Word Count - Ficlet, 1, 365 words.
Rating - PG-13 for a bit of snogging!
Summary - The dangers of being in love with a wolf confront Tonks…
Author’s Notes - I apologise for the content of this, but it’s something I’ve always wondered

Comments

[lady_bracknell]

This is a really interesting idea. I've read a number of fics where Tonks almost wanted Remus to bite her to take away the dangerous aspect of his argument, so this was a refreshing change, and I liked the slighty ambiguous ending, that they're together for the moment, and attempting to deal with what's happened, but we don't know how it's going to work out in the end.

I'd echo others' praise for the imagery, too - I really liked the contrast between the idea of a perfect, beautiful sunset, and the decidedly un-perfect and not at all beautiful situation they've found themselves in.

[everknowledge]

Damn... It's dark and intense and a very interesting place to go. I like it!

"I smile and nod and take the assurance from his lips like the lie we both know it is." That is a great line.

[shimotsuki]

Wow. This is ... wow. A very honest look at how Tonks might react if the wolf did try to hurt her.

I think my favorite thing about this piece is the way it invokes so much about the background of the scene without specifying details. Like Tonks's thought about the eyes and the talk and the pointing fingers, followed by Remus asking if she is all right, now -- they must have just dodged an unpleasant situation, but this is left as a general sense of uneasiness in the background. The attack itself, too, probably makes a stronger impression for not being described

[funaga]

Ugh. I've never considered this possibility before. You've written it so well. I love how Remus is so desperate to.... protect her. But from who? How can he protect her from himself, now? And I love how it's not like she wants him or doesn't want him, but is just so numb and cold.

desperately trying not to let the hardness that burns within me rage to
the point where it becomes uncontrollable.

But she is INSIDE that hardness. It's so volatile and she could easily lose control, and yet it's the only place she can control herself and face the situation.

I love that Remus is so desperate for them to move on, for her to stay with him. Despite the cruddy situation, this is an absolutely fantastic piece.

[molly_coddles]

This is a very interesting idea - and a fantastically done fic, of course.

Good job exploring the possibilities!