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Prompt 7: Sunny Side Up

Jan 10, 2007 00:15

Title: Sunny Side Up
Author: Phe_o
Format: Short fic
Ratings & Warnings: PG-13 for a bit of adult content and one swear word.
Prompt: 7 (Egg)
Word Count: 913
Summary: “Remus Lupin opened one bleary eye. Unsure of how he’d managed to fall asleep on the settee in the living room of Number Twelve, Grimmauld Place, he was nonetheless even more wary of ( Read more... )

phe_o, prompt 6, prompt 7

Comments 14

scarlett71177 January 10 2007, 06:25:48 UTC

Oh I love the prank. Go Tonks!

It would be just like a man to declare his love and then pass out. :-)

Best line- “You did okay, you know, for a drunk. I mean, it took you a while to find where to go and what to do and all that, but I suspect you were a bit rusty.”

Hilarious.

phe_o January 11 2007, 04:56:56 UTC

Wouldn't it, though? Men.

Thank you so much. I'm so glad you liked it! I had so much fun with the dialogue in this. I feel as if it's quite unfinished--not the ending, per say, but within it. Still, I'm happy you found it funny! Thanks again.

molly_coddles January 10 2007, 18:20:43 UTC

Argh, Remus! Heart (and egg) breaking. Funny Tonks didn't just chuck an egg at his head for putting himself in a shell.
Drunken confessions are nothing to 'yolk' about. ;)

Cute and sigh-worthy all at once! Nice fic.

lessthangreat January 10 2007, 18:52:47 UTC

Funny Tonks didn't just chuck an egg at his head for putting himself in a shell. That's such a good point. You know she wanted to. :-P

phe_o January 11 2007, 04:58:16 UTC

Oh, yeah! I still feel as if it's unfinished a bit in the development section, so...maybe she will. ;)

phe_o January 11 2007, 04:57:35 UTC

Oh, what an eggcellent review! ;)

I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks so much!

devonwood January 10 2007, 18:46:18 UTC

Tonks turned back to the eggs. “I was quite taken aback, of course, but you just seemed so drunk and sad, and I thought, well, the man needs at least one last go before he kicks the bucket.”

XD

Absolutely hilarious. Oh, what I would have given to be a fly on that wall. Hilarious use of the egg-propt. It was eggcellent. ;)

phe_o January 11 2007, 05:25:08 UTC

Thanks so much! I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

lessthangreat January 10 2007, 18:54:57 UTC

This was lovely. And it actually made me hurt for Tonks' disappointment, even amidst all the absolutely hilarious lines in here. I adore this piece.

phe_o January 11 2007, 05:28:48 UTC

Well, I adore your review! :D Thank you so much. I'm so glad that you enjoyed it.

shimotsuki January 10 2007, 23:00:08 UTC

Somehow, she didn’t seem as awake and alive as she had been -- Oh, Remus, just how oblivious can you be? This was great. I love the idea of Tonks pulling a completely over-the-top prank as a way of finding out whether Remus really meant what he said. Subtle, she's not -- and a good thing too, since he is. Then the last paragraph...*sniff*. Remus, wake up already.

phe_o January 11 2007, 05:29:44 UTC

Thank you so much! I was thinking of having Sirius come in and "confirm" the story in part... perhaps in another draft! I'm glad you liked it though. Thanks so much!