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Jul 16, 2006 19:12

Title:Our Father
Author:freakinwinky
Prompt:#27
Raiting: R (To be on the safe side)
Format: one shot fic
Word count:2,803
Summary:Remus would no longer let Greyback walk over him. Even if he could not save her, he would not submit. (Set durring HBP)
Warnings:Very dark. Non-con situation, violence, mild swearing.
Author's note: prequel to The Place Between and ( Read more... )

freakinwinky, prompt 27

Comments 6

laverinth July 17 2006, 00:55:16 UTC

Psst! This could really use an lj-cut. >.>

freakinwinky July 17 2006, 01:00:49 UTC

*face palm* Thanks! That was really embarassing. Sorry everyone!

wizardelfgirl July 17 2006, 17:03:55 UTC

That was awesome! I loved it!
There had to be a moment when Remus would snap and refuse to continue killing. The way you show Greyback's punishment is so real, so well described, you can feel Remus' pain and humilliation, it's like you wanna cry wof him and with him.

freakinwinky July 17 2006, 19:59:39 UTC

Thank you! After working on this peice for so long, I'm still a little shaky about how it came out. I'm glad someone liked it anyway.

iamweebles July 18 2006, 14:51:39 UTC

This is really powerfully and well written, but I have to be honest, it veered into just too uncomfortable for me to read (which I think is a mark of how well you've done it). No matter how much I try, once I get to the point where Remus confronts Greyback I start to skim and my mind skitters away - more because the first part of the piece has made me so unsettled I just can't continue. It's just too dark for me to take in at one sitting. And then when I read the second part by itself after leaving it a couple of days - truly I wanted Remus to die rather than to continue this humiliation.

freakinwinky July 18 2006, 15:48:32 UTC

First off thanks very much for reviewing! Since this was such a difficult peice to write, I should have assumed it would be difficult to read. I did consider ending the entire story with the first portion and then just sort of implying that the second took place, which is perhaps what I should have done? Oh well, I suppose my mind takes very strange turns at two o'clock in the morning. (Which is when I wrote the majority of this story). Anyway thanks for the concrit, and I'm glad you think it was well written at any rate. That is a very nice compliment indeed!